Lord Tyrone

[Awsome21346]

NAME: Lord Tyrone
FACTION: The Shadow Brotherhood
RANK: Sith Acolyte/ Bounty Hunter
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 26
SEX: Male
HEIGHT: 6ft
WEIGHT: 178 lbs
EYES: Yellow
HAIR: Dark blue
SKIN: Light
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes. Very

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES
+Very strong force user (has access to force rage, see ability section)
-Not that good at lightsaber
+Can use a blaster
-Angers quickly
APPEARANCE:
He has a robotic arm which is covered by his armour. His chest area is quite exposed.

BIOGRAPHY:
He was a Jedi knight trained by Alek Jakall. He then fell to the dark side at the end of the clone wars. HHe was placed in the inquisitor program before becoming a acolyte. I was put in carbonate for crimes against the galaxy until being released by the contractor.
SHIP:
No, uses a variety of imperial regulation ships.

KILLS:


Allies:
The Contracter

Items:
Double bladed red lightsaber, That can be split to two. A DL-44 blaster pistol.

Abilities:
Basic force (Jedi and Sith)
Force rage (a form trigger by emence rage boosting force abilities lasts for a short amount of time user slips into a mediative state after us is still able to defend himself in said state)

 

[Juggerduck]

[member="Awsome21346"], hi! A couple of things to point out: Per the Character Creation rules, you need to have at least two weaknesses. Secondly, our timeline places us over 800 years after the original Star Wars trilogy (eps 4-6), so unless you can justify it in your biography, your character couldn't have been trained by Mace Windu nor the Inquisitor. Finally, all Force-using characters start at the bottom of the rank structure, meaning you need to be an Apprentice or a Padawan; you can't start as a Sith Lord or Jedi Knight.

 

[Awsome21346]

[member="Awsome21346"], hi! A couple of things to point out: Per the Character Creation rules, you need to have at least two weaknesses. Secondly, our timeline places us over 800 years after the original Star Wars trilogy (eps 4-6), so unless you can justify it in your biography, your character couldn't have been trained by Mace Windu. Finally, all Force-using characters start at the bottom of the rank structure, meaning you need to be an Apprentice or a Padawan; you can't start as a Sith Lord or Jedi Knight.

I have changed it can you check please.

 

[Darth Eversor]

BIOGRAPHY: He was a Jedi knight trained by Mace Windu. He then fell to the dark side at the end of the clone wars. He was trained in the dark side of the force by the Inquisitor. HE was placed in the inquisitor program before rising through the ranks of the Sith to became a Sith lord.

Now, I personally don't have any qualms with your profile. That's what I would say if everything here was peachy king, but unfortunately, I do have a bone to pick with this; however, do not take this as rude. It's merely a constructive criticism at the least.

If you have any questions, you should refer to the rules and guidelines, perhaps even taking a crack at the timeline would help you out.

Now, what I do want to point out is the fact you're directly referencing a canonical figure as almost a way to sugar coat your character, please have a higher standard for such things. I'm no one to judge or tell you how to write, but I want you to think for a moment about how much more creative it would be and how much more expansive you could really make a character that's from your own imagination. Any way, this was probably a bit much.

In any case, welcome! If you have any questions, comments, etc, feel free to shoot me a message!

 

[Boggo Flib]

[member="Awsome21346"]

I like your name