Approved Planet Nothmir

[Srina Talon]

[member="FederationPrime"]

Ah - That makes a lot more sense haha. It's fine to link the custom world as a reference point, however, I would ask that you be a little more specific:

Location: South west of Aviprine

Do you mean the "Hex" to the Southwest? Technically, there is a little room in the same hex.

If you mean for it to go to the Hex right beside it adding in "To the Hex directly West of Aviprine" would clear everything right up. I only suggest adding it this way because then there's no question.

Thanks for your time!

 

[ADifferentSort]

[member='Srina Talon'] Thanks for all your help!

Edit made

 

[Srina Talon]

[member="FederationPrime"] No problem at all. Thanks for all the effort! Enjoy! Approved.

 

[John Locke]

Pre-codex template

Submission Name: Nothmir
Link to Submission: https://www.starwarsrp.net/threads/nothmir.109324/
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Overhaul edits/rewrite so I can begin rebuilding a minor faction.

Moved to pre-codex per OP Request.

Please remember to include a list of changes made when you tag a member of codex staff to move the submission to live judgement.

 

[ADifferentSort]

Changes (Note: This is a total overhaul)

• Updated template
• System name
• System features
• Terrain and geographical features
• Culture
• Government (Minor edits)
• Technology
• Historical information

 

[ADifferentSort]

Judah Lesan

Ready for codex judging. Edits have been listed in the previous reply. Thanks in advance.

 

[Judah Lesan]

@Federation Prime

Your edits look good. There are two main things here.

First your moons. I‘m unsure why you’re linking to 4 deities and earth mythology. Codex guidelines make it pretty clear that earth terms should not be used, and while I see no problem in using Latin names for the moons, I don’t see the need to link to earth mythology. Maybe you can convince, but I’m inclined to have you remove the links. But hey… make your case and let’s see what happens. I’m definitely open.

Second you’ve added regions under Historical Information. Could you move them under Major Locations. I think they would fit in the template perfectly under that heading.

Tag me once that’s ready. Thanks!

 

[Judah Lesan]

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Judah Lesan

Edits made, should be good to go.

 

[Judah Lesan]

ADifferentSort

Thanks!!

[PENDING SECONDARY REVIEW]

Srina Talon and Allyson Locke

 

[Allyson Locke]

Approved