Approved Planet Nuria

[Darkon]

I will work on the locations today. In a few hours, when I have the time for it.

No need to apologise. It was my mistake to mix the different customs. But then again, that is the fun of cultural mixups. The novelty of it.


Edit:

[member="Srina Talon"], I have fleshed out the locations a bit more and think it should be enough for the moment. If the need for more content arises, I will request a submission modification as you suggested.

Did I overlook anything you pointed out?

 

[Srina Talon]

[member="Darkon"] Those were excellent additions! I did notice that the font tends to hop sizes - Would you like me to fix it for you so that it's all uniform? I don't know if you make edits on your phone but I know that can be a pain.

Also, in the Major Locations, I noticed something called "The First" - I have a feeling it might be better explained in your species sub but it might be worth noting in the "Government:" section. Perhaps, even just a note about the head of a house being known as "The First" if that's the case.

Lastly, is there anything else you might want to add to the History? The Major Locations are fantastic now, but, fleshing out the History can also add greater depth to the planet. I noticed that technology seems to become affected in this system. Perhaps that is why the human ships crash landed? If so, that would be something nifty to note there.

Just let me know either way on the above and thanks again for working with me!

 

[Srina Talon]

[member="Darkon"] It's been a few days so I'm just checking in. Status update?

 

[Darkon]

I've edited some tidbits already but am not finished yet. Real life interfered, unfortunately. As for the history, I don't think I have much to add at this point. It will likely become an update at a later time.

I did not mention the technical interferences again at the crashdown of the human ships, because I had mentioned it twice already before. But of course the ships did crash because their technology malfunctioned as they entered the system and failed completely as they reached the planet.

 

[Srina Talon]

[member="Darkon"] No problem at all! RL always comes first, though, I apologize for my delay as I didn't see that you had responded. I've followed the thread to keep it from happening again.

I've edited some tidbits already but am not finished yet.

Does this mean that you're working on it a little more? Or that we're good to go?

 

[Darkon]

I think this is as good as it will get for now. Either that or I'll never finish it because there is always something new I think of.

Would you please finalize it?

 

[Srina Talon]

[member="Darkon"] Yes - We're good to go. I just wasn't sure if you were still currently working on it. Thanks a million for working with me! Enjoy.

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