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Approved Starship The Celestial

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Affiliation: Chalim Vern
Manufacturer: Chalim Vern
Model: YJX-1200 heavy freighter
Modularity: N/A
Production: Unique
Material: Durasteel
Classification:Freighter
Length: 64.8m
Width: 26.2
Height: 17.6

Armament: 9
8 forward facing autoblasters
8 IFWAG-4 Hexlaser Turrets
4 proton torpedo launchers
Defenses: 8
Upgraded military grade deflector shields
Durasteel plating

Hangar: Chalim's personal speeder bike
2 saotome assault speeder approval
1 generic speeder

Special Features:
micro thrusters
Upgraded laser turret
Upgraded engine
Stygium crystal stealth system
Maneuverability Rating: 5
Speed Rating: 5
Hyperdrive Class: 1

Strengths:
Stealthy: the stygium crystal system allows for The Celestial to become invisible to the naked eye
Good offence : the ships slightly higher manuverability and speed with its decent armament makes it a good ship in a fight
Weaknesses:
Lightly armored: while the ship has been outfitted with better shields, if they go down the ship won't be able to hold against an attack for long
Overload: the amount of modifications have created a strain on the reactor, and to keep the ship fighting many inessential systems need to be turned off

Description: The Celestial was just a ship gifted to Chalim Vern when he turned 23 by his coworkers and family. It started as a simple ship that had was designed to be a slightly tougher freighter, but nothing above average. Chalim has a hobby for improving starships, and wanted to make his the best he could.
He started with new weapons, he swapped the turbolasers with the new hexIasers after his crew was attacked by a squadron of heavily modified x-wings that his crew had a hard time of destroying. He was able to get these from a secondhand seller after about 6 months in space. He received the hyper-drive as payment for smuggling a few exotic creatures to some wealthy people on Coruscant. He changed the engines and added the thrusters because Chalim found himself unable to actually fire on anything from the cockpit because the ship was to slow to follow any fighters. These he was able to actually buy, after going a year of saving up to get them. The torpedoes were added after the Domination of Mechis where he found himself having trouble destroying incoming enemy fighters with his autoblasters, they were fairly easy to get and install, as they are nothing special. His latest excursion to take stygium crystals went very well, and he quickly set out to outfit his ship with them. They were the hardest to add, and took many missions of having them suddenly fail for some unexpected reason to sort out all of the bugs in the system.
Development Thread: Stygium crystals, 20 posts
Domination of Mechis
Who Can Use This: Chalim Vern and crew
Primary Source: YJX-1200 heavy freighter
 
[member="Chalim Vern"]


Hello there! Thanks for choosing the Factory! There's just a few things we need to address here...


Chalim Vern said:
Armament: 12
This is almost average Armament for a small Freighter. As such, could you please either add more weapons to suit your Armament Rating, or Reduce the Rating to 8?


Chalim Vern said:
5 http://starwarsrp.ne...ssault-speeder/

This Item is marked as Private Market... do you have proof of ownership being allowed to use them?




This is a fairly small ship. The length of all of your speeders is 40.5meters. If you have permission to use the Speeders, I think it would be best to reduce the Assault Speeders to 2.

Your Speed and Maneuverability is pretty low.

Typically requires development: Below 5 for a 50m vessel or 7 for a 180m vessel with a low armament.)
Could you bring them up to 5?




Chalim Vern said:
Modularity: http://starwarsrp.ne...s/?hl=thrustershttp://starwarsrp.ne...capital +weapon http://starwarsrp.ne...gine/?hl=engine http://starwars.wiki...SP05_hyperdrive

Could you remove these from Modularity? This space usually has any items or options the Ship can readily swap out or change to in the future. Typically, most people just put "None" or "N/A"
Your list also shows in the Special Features, so it works out.




Chalim Vern said:
Upgraded engine (http://starwarsrp.ne...gine/?hl=engine http://starwars.wiki...P05_hyperdrive)

Affiliation: Closed Market (Directorate, select Lucerne Labs customers)
This item is set to Closed Market, do you have proof of ownership or use of the item?




Chalim Vern said:
Great armament: the autoblasters and upgraded turrets give the ship great offensive capability
With below Average Armament, you could either remove this, or change to Good Armament and good Offense




Chalim Vern said:
Description: The Celestial was just a ship gifted to Chalim Vern when he turned 23 by his coworkers and family. It has been three years since then, and through many battles and repairs, Chalim has modified it to his needs. His latest excursion to take stygium crystals went very well, and he quickly set out to outfit his ship with them.
If you could offer just a little more description here, possibly how you came across all of your modifications, how long it took you to modify your ship to use them and similar, that would help flesh it out.



If you would like to increase your armament -and- increase your speed, this will be needing development.

Thank you for the Submission! Please get my attention when these items have been addressed!
 
[member="Chalim Vern"]

I'm happy to approve this, but are you sure you don't want to clean up the formatting? It's quite messy at the moment. Do you know how to hyperlink text?
 
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