The Death of Undin Jaii (?)

[Drogh]

Critism shoundn't be considerd drama, people asked what they thought and they are giving him their answers.

If I'm going to be honnest, I don't like your character, nothing about him feels real. I know we're in the Starwars unverise but, it just doesn't feel like your kind of charcter could exist within this world.

 

[Kamon's OOC]

[member="Undin Jaii Kryze"]
I was fourteen when I first started roleplaying in the Star Wars universe. That was a long time ago now.

To be honest I wasn't any good back then. I wrote very short posts with poor sentence structure and content. I loved Star Wars, though. I respected what it was, and I respected my fellow RPers enough to treat Star Wars seriously, not to besmirch it by writing Dragonball Z and pretending it's Star Wars.

What the others are trying to say here is that you need to respect Star Wars and your fellow RPers. Right now you are doing neither. To put it bluntly, you need to grow up. There are a lot of excellent RPer's on this site, many of whom have chimed in here to lay out the negatives of you as an RPer and your character. That should be enough to tell you something. Saying "this is the internet and dank memes is the language" is not going to win you anything but disdain. We are WRITERS. Writers are masters of the written word, who love people like Chaucer and Shakespeare, or in our case Michael Stackpole and Timothy Zahn, because of the stories they weave and the verbal beauty they use to do so.

If you want to post memes and general shenanigans, confine it to where it belongs: places like the posting games and such.

 

[James Justice]

language of Shakespeare and Chaucer, and that's what you do with it?

[member="Undin Jaii Kryze"] Being 14, English not being your primary language (I am sorry, but I found this somewhat doubtful after having rp'ed with you) is no excuse for your OOC conduct and your IC actions. If I were you, I would stop. I would quit acting this way because frankly, its unbecoming of a human being. You have the breath of life in your lungs, a spark that is so rare and indistinguishable. You have access to a wealth of information, opportunities that many of those who posses this spark do not, those in third world countries, those who are under oppressive governments.

You are sentient. You are an animal, but you are not primal. I recommend you do credit to your species and act sentient rather than primal. I get it, a sense of humor is fun. I have one just as much as anyone. Just ask anybody who hangs out with me OOC on this board and they will tell you I have the best memes, the most wild jokes, and the insanest RL. Live life to the fullest. That doesn't mean be a troll and ruin everyone else's good time. It means experience a variety of emotions and actions. Not just mischief. Quit running from this possibility of being a productive, grand member not only of society but this board. If you shape up, you actually could have fun. you actually could be able to enjoy threads and start a writing circle of sorts. Until then, expect no redemption and don't expect anyone to take you seriously.


Cheers.

Edit: [member="Darth Ignus"] well spoken sir.

 

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

[member="Drogh"]

I didn't exactly ask for this, I asked if anyone had grudges, not to lay their thoughts about me as a writer or my character.


[member="Darth Ignus"]

"by writing Dragonball Z and pretending it's Star Wars.", I'm just going to point this out as wrong, and just leave it at that.




I really just wanted to make peace with anyone that I had done wrong with this char IC, but it seems this isn't the day for that.

 

[Captain Jordan]

Geez, when did this go from "How can someone clear out the grudges against a character?" to "Why does said player suck as a person?"

As much as I agree, Undin could mature, let's face facts. If every one of us were fourteen right now, there'd probably be a lot more people who would find things like 'dank memes' appropriate. Or at least humorous. Sure, as it stands, we're a community of various ages, but that goes both ways. If you want someone to act older than fourteen, do try not to be a child yourself by putting her/him down.

You don't have to look much further than basically any OOC topic to find dank memes. Seemingly every invasion or announcement thread devolves into a posting of stupid and tired GIFs and quotes. That Undin said outright what everyone does only makes him brash enough (youth will do that) to say it. I've seen plenty of this thread's participants do the very same in the past and just be part of the fun.

 

[Undin Jaii Kryze]

[member="Irajah Ven"]

Before I get even more unwanted criticism, could you please archive this?


[member="Captain Jordan"]

Thanks for standing up for me.

 

[RIP Carlyle Rausgeber]

[member="Undin Jaii Kryze"]

I'm gonna give you some advice here in list format. It's gonna echo what other people have said

1. Memes: Just stop. Please for the love of God stop. It's one thing to post memes on your Facebook page or tumblr, etc, but keep them off here. We don't need to hear about how you plan to literally make a Harambe-Mandolorian bounty hunter on this site. Look, I get you're trying to be funny through randomly associating this site with broader internet humour, but it's clumsy and dumb as.

2. Don't get offended when people give you advice and you don't like it. I'm not too sure if this thread counts for it, but you do come off as a little defensive here. Don't ride off on your high horse. Fact of the matter is, is that no one's trying to attack you here. We all would probably like to write with you at some point. But the fact your regurgitate unfunny memes all the time is really off putting. We're all trying to help you become a better poster, so don't write us off here.

 

[Kamon's OOC]

[member="Captain Jordan"]
When I was fourteen I was taking creative writing classes, LARPing Star Wars at recess, writing Star Wars short stories, reading every Star Wars EU novel I could get my hands on (which back then meant actual, physical copies), and designing starfighters in my notebooks.

 

[Kuzo]

Closing this.