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[Kaila Irons]

I was originally planning to do this ages ago at 500 and forgot, then 600 came and I forgot again, 700 seemed like a weird number to me so 800 it is!

I've had an interesting time finding Kaila's voice and admittedly I feel like there's a lot I could or should be doing better, especially combat. Honestly it's a little terrifying to write one of these actually, but it's long overdue and I'd be missing out on the chance to improve otherwise!

So here I am looking for feedback. For the character, for how I write her, how I write in general, whatever you think's worth mentioning really! Especially if you've been writing with me somewhat consistently, you may have additional insight, though all constructive feedback is welcome!

Love yall <3



edit: I was advised to link threads I'm proud of

• Woostri Invasion - was really fun to write teamwork and work with the opp
• Zinder - maybe proud isn't the word but i enjoyed writing that side of kaila lol
• Susevfi - kaila's final transformation into sithdom because of quinn's death. honestly everything from that post onward so emotional
• Serpent of Echnos - that last post where she stands on her own against the odds and the first post, i was proud of those
• Duel with Kasir - one of few instances where i got to write kaila's tactical approach to niman with kasir's help <3
• War in the rim - kaila choosing a darth name for herself and letting her fears channel violence was the first time i ever felt proud while writing her lol and i couldn't have asked for a better apprentice to darth transformation, thanks in large to Srina

 

[Caelan Valoren]

I have not gotten to RP with you yet is my only critique.

 

[Ala Quin]

One of the things I love most about how you write all your characters, and I saw this mostly through Kaila, is that you are intensely true to who they are as a character. You know their personality, and their motivations. You stick to it come hell or high water. Now for someone with a flighty an imagination and proclivity for random stupid ideas every 5 minutes, like me, it can be frustrating. Why? Because you stick to who your character is and do not go off on any crazy plot or thread idea imaginable.

I know I used the word frustrating in that ramble, but please know that I do not mean it as 'you are frustrating' but rather 'I become frustrated by your quality as a writer that sticks to their characters nature and motivations'. And I am in awe of it. You know their voice, and you keep it.

The reason that I admire this is because I sometimes feel like I lose my tether on what motivates my characters. So I respect you immensely.

Also. If Quinn Varanin treats Kaila bad, Ala will burn down the universe to protect her.

 

[Tamsin Graves]

I know I said I was going to talk shit about you in this. Truth is I really can't Im biased AF when it comes to Kaila.

You write her well and know your character so well. You have shown me her whole range of emotion from kind, Caring, Embarrassed, and Ready to kick ass. She is a well built character that you seem to understand really well how she will react to every situation.

Even though to have a firm grip on the character, you adapt well without compromising the core of the character. I don't know if it intentional or not but you also show the characters youth and inexperience in areas as well.

I can only go off what I have seen. I have seen this character go from not thinking she was meant to be a sith, to being thrust into the sith deep end and learning to swim. She still ic at times isn't sure she fits or has a place, the self doubt she has really brings the character to life making them feel real.

I also have to mention you forgetting your apprentice but not as a bad thing but how you were willing to use as running joke with me and showing a bit of Kaila's inexperience. Also with how Tamsin has to act like the adult in thier friendship. It makes me laugh everytime and it's fun not have to be serious all the time.

Kaila can be brash and impulsive but she is learning and it has caused some memorable moments ic imo. Her romance game is up there as well even if for a bit ic it annoyed Tamsin. Lol

I can't stop praising this character enough both for how amazing she is and the writer is. Also for taking a chance on me and wanting to be apart of my stories.

As for my critics stop trying to get us killed (actually love that), your memory sucks (don't take that as mean I say it with love), and get some DAMN SLEEP!

Also Tamsin will kill anyone who harms, threatens, abuses, or treats Kaila poorly. You are all on notice behave!!!

 

[Kaila Irons]

Also for taking a chance on me and wanting to be apart of my stories.

best chance I've taken on chaos, 100%!




but yes i will try to sleep more

 

[Kirie]

To me, Kaila is the name that comes to mind when I think of the "good person in a bad place" Sith character. She reads as this person who, if she hadn't been thrust into service, brainwashed, tortured and turned into a Sith acolyte, would be fighting on a different side. As it stands, she's grown into a powerful, influential, and profoundly moral character who is always second guessing herself and her place in the Sith. As a person writing a story with similar themes, it's really inspiring to read.

I feel like my favourite Kaila threads are those where she has someone to protect or something to stand up for, whether this be her adoptive sister, her love, or just someone weaker in need of protecting. Given her righteousness, I would really like to see Kaila's vision for the Empire and the future she envisions explored further, as well as any internal conflicts that arise between that and her conscience.

Another really interesting facet of the character is the blurred line between the Darth Anathemous persona and Kaila Irons. Would be cool to read some unpacking of how Kaila compartmentalizes those parts of herself and the long-term impact of that.

A few other things I find myself thinking about when I read your character are:

• What does Kaila look like at her 'best' vs at her 'worst'?
• What's her happy ending?
• Does Kaila wish she or her life were different?

To finish this rambling feedback- I wanted to say that you are a pleasure to write with and I always enjoy reading your stuff. As a character, Kaila is always an engaging read and as a writer, you are a conscientious and enthusiastic partner. I'm looking forward to writing out more of Kaila's story with you in the future

 

[Everest Vale]

I've obviously spammed you loads about how much I love what I've read from Kaila, but yeah, I love her. I wish I was more familiar with everything in her story, but as I develop a greater understanding of her and see how she interacts with her experiences, whatever they are, I'm perpetually amazed. You write her so extremely well and it honestly really inspires me with my own writing.

I very much hope we get the chance to write before long. I would love to meet her in the field, in whatever capacity that may be. Either way I'm aiming to keep a close eye on her tale going forward. <3

 

[Azurine Varek]

Thus far, I've only gotten the chance to interact with Kaila once, but I had been wanting to do so for a very long time. And The main thing I have to say is dang it has been absolutely worth it!

Not only are you a lovely person to coordinate with and talk to, but Kaila is such a well written and beautifully played character as a whole. Her conflict against Carnifex, and how that has bled into how she's reacted and treated his Jedi padawan prisoner is such a fun thing to see play out. In general, I would say you've done a lovely job with her, and I applaud all the work you've put in!

For possible constructive criticisms (this is always the part that I'm really crap at, but I know how important it is for many of us to receive that as well so I will do my best here) I would love to see her play more into that confliction that comes with the fact that she believes her path is the right one while also maintaining continuous contact with people that don't necessarily share the same views of the world she does. Like, how does this contradiction effect her? What keeps her holding onto those ideals in the face of it? Are there ways you can play up the drama surrounding the game of mental chess being played to position her in a place where she could act further on those ideals? Absolutely play it up, lean into the drama of it and let us see it through her eyes

That being said, I think you're doing absolutely amazing without that and really it was just me throwing out something for you to take into the future if you so desire!

Looking forward to seeing how all these set up story beats unfold for her!

 

[Laphisto]

a phenominal character, its so interesting to see the contrasts and character development from kaila. given shes a sith she still acts with a moral compass - at least marginally - which is great to see