[member="Allyson Locke"]
Verbs. It's gotta be verbs. One thing I see a lot of people doing is being blatant about their descriptors, their adjectives and adverbs. To me, that makes the author's voice too present. Like, if I was to refer to Jorus as 'the Jedi' or 'the smuggler' or 'the dirtbag,' that'd be accurateish and clear, but it wouldn't ring true. Instead, I use verbs and throwaway details that show rather than tell. I could call Jorus something unkind or describe his grungy clothes in detail...or I could just mention offhand that he wipes his hands on a rag or his shirt, picks his nails with a knife, wipes beer off his chin with his sleeve. Verb, detail, verb, detail. You get the idea without me having to tell you. That's what works best for me, anyway. That help?