Darth Banshee
Exiled Queen of Serenno
[member="Cira"] I can work with any none protected animals
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Cira
Best Onion
[member="Darth Banshee"]
Then second chance approved.
Then second chance approved.
Good Ol' Scoundrel
Requesting second chance on this - http://starwarsrp.net/topic/92637-besurhbir-iron-hog-multipurpose-assault-walker/
Reasoning to why I think it does not break rule 7:
7. All submissions need to conform to the general idea of Star Wars. No Gundam Wings, no Transformers.
As there is a similar unit in Star Wars canon: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Turtle_Tanker
[member="Cira"]
Reasoning to why I think it does not break rule 7:
7. All submissions need to conform to the general idea of Star Wars. No Gundam Wings, no Transformers.
As there is a similar unit in Star Wars canon: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Turtle_Tanker
[member="Cira"]
Sasha Santhe
Majority Share Holder, Santhe Corporation
I would like to second chance this article.
It has been 60 hours since the judge posted he would review it and in the interim the judge has picked up and reviewed three newer articleswithout reviewing my own article. I believe that I'm not getting a fair chance at a quick and impartial judging process.
[member="Spencer Varanin"] [member="Cira"]
It has been 60 hours since the judge posted he would review it and in the interim the judge has picked up and reviewed three newer articleswithout reviewing my own article. I believe that I'm not getting a fair chance at a quick and impartial judging process.
[member="Spencer Varanin"] [member="Cira"]
S H A D O W
[member="Aera Varad"] - under review
[member="Sasha Santhe"] checking this out and I'll assign a judge, ?currently at work I apologize for the delay on your submission
[member="Sasha Santhe"] checking this out and I'll assign a judge, ?currently at work I apologize for the delay on your submission
S H A D O W
[member="Aera Varad"]
[member="Sasha Santhe"]
both are granted second chances I'll be handling the latter
[member="Sasha Santhe"]
both are granted second chances I'll be handling the latter
Captain Larraq
Capitalist
Bombshell Genius
I would like to second-chance the Hammurabi artificial intelligence. Now that the required development has been made...
[member="Spencer Varanin"]
[member="Spencer Varanin"]
Captain Larraq
Capitalist
[member="Spencer Varanin"]
I'd like to request that the following submission be brought out of archives. Also, for future projects, please keep Lis away from my submissions. I'm tired of her throwing a fit when I point out evidence contrary to her opinions.
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/97059-type-3-keldabe-class-battleship/
I'd like to request that the following submission be brought out of archives. Also, for future projects, please keep Lis away from my submissions. I'm tired of her throwing a fit when I point out evidence contrary to her opinions.
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/97059-type-3-keldabe-class-battleship/
S H A D O W
[member="Captain Larraq"]
Under review.
Under review.
Druchi
Active Member
[member="Spencer Varanin"]
Makes big wide pretty eyes at you to get approval and out of archives pretty please.
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/94942-raider-iv/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/96112-raid-on-the-aeten-ii-miners-guild/
Makes big wide pretty eyes at you to get approval and out of archives pretty please.
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/94942-raider-iv/
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/96112-raid-on-the-aeten-ii-miners-guild/
S H A D O W
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Orihime Ike
Forceborn Daughter
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/97936-crieff-class-immobilization-cannon/
The denial was strange with one major thing being not even a fact. The Cube is referenced within the submission
Force augmenting crystals have been used by Sasori before with different augmented crystals at a smaller and more destructive scale.
Sasori Light Gun
Sasori Underbarrel Crystal
Sasori Directional Crystal
The ability to use crystal for weapons is also canon and easily done enough with Kyber crystals
The technology of using crystals for weapons, specifically kyber crystals which are noted as
I can see the main concern as when a crystal reaches a certain size it can be used for superweapons. I am more then happy to work and try to balance this as the intent is not that but a riot gun that is non lethal so breaking and shaping any large crystals into the proper size is something I would be more then happy to do.
The ammunition being used as force energy bypassing shields and armor as well makes sense. ray, particle, molecular, thermal shielding ect ect are not designed to deflect force energy. They had made to deflect standard forms of energy. Force energy is a protection bubble or barrier which is made from force energy or vong biot which is force dead, void stone, nullification field.
Additionally I have gone and done some more dev for it with a semi helpful crystal harvesting thread which given I have done so many and Sasori uses crystals in all of their things even mass producing crystals it is not that hard and discussing the uses of the weapon itself. As well as addressing and balancing more of the submission to try and address the few problems but the cube thing there was really no way to address that as it wasn't used in any way shape or form to create this item as the judge claimed when he denied it.
The denial was strange with one major thing being not even a fact. The Cube is referenced within the submission
The cube in question is referenced as designs and ideas. It is never said that it is used. So it being denied on this is strange and confusing. Considering that
A quick search reveals the characters mother own the cube in the canon items list Though as it says within the submission there are designs and parts. The cubes reference is not as involved in making but a something of fluff to provide detail for the time period.
Force augmenting crystals have been used by Sasori before with different augmented crystals at a smaller and more destructive scale.
Sasori Light Gun
Sasori Underbarrel Crystal
Sasori Directional Crystal
The ability to use crystal for weapons is also canon and easily done enough with Kyber crystals
The technology of using crystals for weapons, specifically kyber crystals which are noted as
which is very different from how it was before. The crystals and getting them in the right size for both the thread which is noted as having harvested thousands of them and more with access to crystal caves across the galaxy.
I can see the main concern as when a crystal reaches a certain size it can be used for superweapons. I am more then happy to work and try to balance this as the intent is not that but a riot gun that is non lethal so breaking and shaping any large crystals into the proper size is something I would be more then happy to do.
The ammunition being used as force energy bypassing shields and armor as well makes sense. ray, particle, molecular, thermal shielding ect ect are not designed to deflect force energy. They had made to deflect standard forms of energy. Force energy is a protection bubble or barrier which is made from force energy or vong biot which is force dead, void stone, nullification field.
Additionally I have gone and done some more dev for it with a semi helpful crystal harvesting thread which given I have done so many and Sasori uses crystals in all of their things even mass producing crystals it is not that hard and discussing the uses of the weapon itself. As well as addressing and balancing more of the submission to try and address the few problems but the cube thing there was really no way to address that as it wasn't used in any way shape or form to create this item as the judge claimed when he denied it.
Intent: To create a defensive weapon able to be utilized by the jedi on their ships that can deliver a surprise.
Development Thread:
Development
In search of the next story - Discovery of the cannon and discussion as well as retrieving the pieces.
Prana - Discussion and talks about improving the cannon
Eye of the Storm - Sala'dine sends crystal augmentation of ship weapons data to jedi along with other research
Crystal Gathering: While possessing quantity the quality is not there and I can admit it.
Don't Worry Little Sister.... there are more - Orihime gathers crystals while her little sister tries to break out fo her shell and construct her lightwhip
Been a Long Time - Nico and her padawan train and gather crystals for projects
A party for the ages - Ayumi makes a deal for Sasori to take crystals from Hok in exchange for food and livestock modules
Manufacturer: Jedi Order/Sasori Research
Model: Dar Light Defense Turbolaser
Affiliation: Jedi Order
Modularity: None
Production: Limited Production for lightside factions
Material:
Desh-Terenthium
Kyber crystal
Focusing Lens
Mount
Classification: Light Turbolaser Cannon
Size: Mounted
Length: 2 meters
Weight: 650 kg
Ammunition Type: Crystal Energy
Ammunition Capacity: Unlimited (Force Energy that requires charging)
Effective Range: Short Range
Rate of Fire: Single Shot (60 second recharge)
Special Features:
Ionize - Disrupts Droids, Electrical Components
Strengths:
Bypasses Shields
Bypasses Armor
Weaknesses:
Needs the Force to Function
Does not cause physical damage
Shorter Range
Flimsy armor protection
Shots require recharge
Cannot Bypass yasalimiri or force dampening bubbles
Description:
Discovered by Orihime Ikehttp://starwarsrp.net/user/1723-orihime-ike/ and Sorel Crieff then crystal cannon is an ancient design that has been revitalized and improved upon. The pair discovered the cannon after finding a holocron on Jakku in a crashed ship, the ship led them through the galaxy to a world on the outer rim where they found an installation used by the jedi to help develop equipment and weapons in ancient times.
Working with each other the two of them managed to get into the facility and discover the different pieces. Finding some of the ideas for designs of the Chu-Gon Dar cube and early prototypes of it. Orihime looking at it as her mother had the remaining cube in her possession. Other equipment that was being designed by the jedi in ancient times as a means to augment their own technology. There was more exploration and discovery for what they might be able to do.
The designs of the cube itself featured little in making the cannon, it was just another thing found within the facility itself along with terraforming torpedo's for working to bring worlds back to life or to life. Force sensitivity scanners. Seeing some of the thoughts that the jedi were making and comparing it to what her mother and Sasori was making. This cannon was a larger version of the equipment they already made.
The cannon the pair discovered came with notes attached to it, talking about ancient weapons and designs that were far stronger then most things in the galaxy and how the larger crystals could be used to power weapons. One of which was the cannon, a light defensive turbolaser that could be mounted on ships and fired off into enemy ships. The designs showed how it would be used.
The cannon focuses the force energies that resonate in the large kyber crystal channeling it into the focusing lens and then blasting it outwards in a short range. For most ships it won't reach capital ship range but it can provide a number of hits directly to enemy ships. The force energy made to impact against the hull of a ship and send a blast of force energy throughout it disabling organics and droids within but leaving it intact.
The designs and cannon were adapted by Sasori who had been experimenting with the methods of it. Making the crystal blasters and shots but this was on a much larger scale of what they were getting things done. The jedi allowing themselves to test it and work with the design. The larger scale means they are relying on the crystal itself and the materials to power it as a weapon.
That also means that it cannot fire off as much as the smaller versions they have developed, the slower rate of fire helps to balance the wider spread and the blasts that are created cannot harm beings that are able to be caught in the shockwave it creates. Immunity or higher resistance to the force allows someone to avoid the effects of it.
The work that has went into the crystal itself to properly shape it from a large uncut crystal into a focused one that fits in the cannon and resonates the force with a focused shot through the lens once they release it sending a short range shot made to hit other ships. The small and lightweight design of the cannon is ideal for it to be used with different vehicles, mounts and ships.
The cannon itself is a less lethal and more upscaled larger version of the different Sasori equipment. From a force light gun designed to harm darksiders and sithspawn. o the underbarrel crystal that is able to be used on equipment or mounted on the wrist. It allows the jedi to as long as they have energy to charge it near unlimited shots unless they pass out.
Equipment such as the directional crystal as well serves much the same way and works directly. Their healing crystal absorbs healing energy with much the same. The larger the crystal the more it resonates with the force and the more they can focus it into a lens and blast to go outwards in a single direction. Muh like First order vessels that used them kyber crystals to augment them.
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While the smaller versions could be used to hrm people they were also not made to go after large groups of people. There was a difference and they were working on some fo the ideas to better improve upon it. To build it up and use the cannon as a method with the force energies from the crystals being recharged by the jedi themselves as they are sending it out. Used in ships to augment itself with the same methods and crystal workings of Sasori's artisan's.
Orihime has worked with Sorel before she wanted to work on more things, going out with her sister Willow to gather more crystals. While her work with her sister wasn't that impressive or standard she really tried to get the girl to do things and went for moving things out with the two of them on Rhen Var. The ability to gather crystals so that they would be able to use all of it.
Primary Source:
Piranha Light Turbolaser - for how to fill it out as I am not used to making ship sized weapons
Sasori Light Gun
Sasori Underbarrel Crystal
Sasori Directional Crystal
Kyber crystal
Development Thread:
Development
In search of the next story - Discovery of the cannon and discussion as well as retrieving the pieces.
Prana - Discussion and talks about improving the cannon
Eye of the Storm - Sala'dine sends crystal augmentation of ship weapons data to jedi along with other research
Crystal Gathering: While possessing quantity the quality is not there and I can admit it.
Don't Worry Little Sister.... there are more - Orihime gathers crystals while her little sister tries to break out fo her shell and construct her lightwhip
Been a Long Time - Nico and her padawan train and gather crystals for projects
A party for the ages - Ayumi makes a deal for Sasori to take crystals from Hok in exchange for food and livestock modules
Manufacturer: Jedi Order/Sasori Research
Model: Dar Light Defense Turbolaser
Affiliation: Jedi Order
Modularity: None
Production: Limited Production for lightside factions
Material:
Desh-Terenthium
Kyber crystal
Focusing Lens
Mount
Classification: Light Turbolaser Cannon
Size: Mounted
Length: 2 meters
Weight: 650 kg
Ammunition Type: Crystal Energy
Ammunition Capacity: Unlimited (Force Energy that requires charging)
Effective Range: Short Range
Rate of Fire: Single Shot (60 second recharge)
Special Features:
Ionize - Disrupts Droids, Electrical Components
Strengths:
Bypasses Shields
Bypasses Armor
Weaknesses:
Needs the Force to Function
Does not cause physical damage
Shorter Range
Flimsy armor protection
Shots require recharge
Cannot Bypass yasalimiri or force dampening bubbles
Description:
"Long ago in forgotten times, when the Sith and Jedi fought for control of the galaxy, weapons there were, of unimaginable power. Always at their heart, a kyber crystal was." ―Yoda
Discovered by Orihime Ikehttp://starwarsrp.net/user/1723-orihime-ike/ and Sorel Crieff then crystal cannon is an ancient design that has been revitalized and improved upon. The pair discovered the cannon after finding a holocron on Jakku in a crashed ship, the ship led them through the galaxy to a world on the outer rim where they found an installation used by the jedi to help develop equipment and weapons in ancient times.
Working with each other the two of them managed to get into the facility and discover the different pieces. Finding some of the ideas for designs of the Chu-Gon Dar cube and early prototypes of it. Orihime looking at it as her mother had the remaining cube in her possession. Other equipment that was being designed by the jedi in ancient times as a means to augment their own technology. There was more exploration and discovery for what they might be able to do.
The designs of the cube itself featured little in making the cannon, it was just another thing found within the facility itself along with terraforming torpedo's for working to bring worlds back to life or to life. Force sensitivity scanners. Seeing some of the thoughts that the jedi were making and comparing it to what her mother and Sasori was making. This cannon was a larger version of the equipment they already made.
The cannon the pair discovered came with notes attached to it, talking about ancient weapons and designs that were far stronger then most things in the galaxy and how the larger crystals could be used to power weapons. One of which was the cannon, a light defensive turbolaser that could be mounted on ships and fired off into enemy ships. The designs showed how it would be used.
The cannon focuses the force energies that resonate in the large kyber crystal channeling it into the focusing lens and then blasting it outwards in a short range. For most ships it won't reach capital ship range but it can provide a number of hits directly to enemy ships. The force energy made to impact against the hull of a ship and send a blast of force energy throughout it disabling organics and droids within but leaving it intact.
The designs and cannon were adapted by Sasori who had been experimenting with the methods of it. Making the crystal blasters and shots but this was on a much larger scale of what they were getting things done. The jedi allowing themselves to test it and work with the design. The larger scale means they are relying on the crystal itself and the materials to power it as a weapon.
That also means that it cannot fire off as much as the smaller versions they have developed, the slower rate of fire helps to balance the wider spread and the blasts that are created cannot harm beings that are able to be caught in the shockwave it creates. Immunity or higher resistance to the force allows someone to avoid the effects of it.
The work that has went into the crystal itself to properly shape it from a large uncut crystal into a focused one that fits in the cannon and resonates the force with a focused shot through the lens once they release it sending a short range shot made to hit other ships. The small and lightweight design of the cannon is ideal for it to be used with different vehicles, mounts and ships.
The cannon itself is a less lethal and more upscaled larger version of the different Sasori equipment. From a force light gun designed to harm darksiders and sithspawn. o the underbarrel crystal that is able to be used on equipment or mounted on the wrist. It allows the jedi to as long as they have energy to charge it near unlimited shots unless they pass out.
Equipment such as the directional crystal as well serves much the same way and works directly. Their healing crystal absorbs healing energy with much the same. The larger the crystal the more it resonates with the force and the more they can focus it into a lens and blast to go outwards in a single direction. Muh like First order vessels that used them kyber crystals to augment them.
Quote
Orihime and Sorel have worked with it and after the initial proposal failed joined Arisa Yune on Klatooine where she was offering ways to work on the cannon. Marked improvements but also ways to take it from the realm of non lethal to destructive which didn't sit right with the pair of jedi who had discovered it. Orihime was looking at many of the things for herself as she went over some of the things.
While the smaller versions could be used to hrm people they were also not made to go after large groups of people. There was a difference and they were working on some fo the ideas to better improve upon it. To build it up and use the cannon as a method with the force energies from the crystals being recharged by the jedi themselves as they are sending it out. Used in ships to augment itself with the same methods and crystal workings of Sasori's artisan's.
Orihime has worked with Sorel before she wanted to work on more things, going out with her sister Willow to gather more crystals. While her work with her sister wasn't that impressive or standard she really tried to get the girl to do things and went for moving things out with the two of them on Rhen Var. The ability to gather crystals so that they would be able to use all of it.
Primary Source:
Piranha Light Turbolaser - for how to fill it out as I am not used to making ship sized weapons
Sasori Light Gun
Sasori Underbarrel Crystal
Sasori Directional Crystal
Kyber crystal
Kalis Affassa
Character
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/95463-tr-v/
i'd like to give this a second go as a minor product.
i can get this going as i had to leave before truly finishing it.
i'd like to give this a second go as a minor product.
i can get this going as i had to leave before truly finishing it.
[member="Braith Achlys"] [member="Kad Forgrin"]
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/103277-knightsbane-first-order/
Requesting that this get pulled out of archives. I wasn't around to post a response to the judge, so I'm not sure if I need to take this second chance, or just reopen with that judge to continue the process.
Anyway, I'll address his concerns here so that if another judge is called in.
"To create a new Force resistant alloy, she biochemically treated the base elements of neutronium, carbon, and coltan by processing them through a special furnace made from a yaret-kor."
Yaret-kor eats the base materials, then processes them through its digestive track to create the bio-based material. I then harvest the material from the biot. You mentioned that I should look into Yuuzhan Vong tech, but I am using Vong tech to create the material. It's not any different than a biot eating something to grow new tissue, which is pretty much what's happening here.
Unlike materials such as Void-Stone, it has no Force Dampening effects (aside from the unlikely instance an FU finds themselves completely enveloped in the material). It just works off the principle of all Vong stuff that it can't be normally detected through the Force. For uncreative FU that rely on lazy tactics to engage an NFU, this could be a problem, but FU can still use their powers indirectly. Pushing a gust of air to hit a user that way. Dropping something heavy on them. Using Force Lighting/Electric Judgement. Cutting them with one of those fancy lightsabers FU so love. Just shooting them or grenading them like Obi-Wan. Decreasing their reaction time to compensate for the loss of precognitive abilities against a target clad in Knightsbane.
I could just save myself the trouble and get kitted out with a Ysalamir and lord over a Jedi wielding nothing but a lightsaber, but that's not really enjoyable for me. In PvP, when I engage someone as an NFU, I would like to be competitive without neutering my FU counterpart as what tends to happen with Mandalorians and other groups running around with all their Ysalamir/Soul-Steel/Void-Stone/etc. swag.
People may be submitting their own versions of materials because they don't have permission from writers of other subs to use their creations. That's why you see so many redundant things in the factory. That's not a valid reason to deny something. In any case, my alloy does have some advantages over biot materials like yorik coral or vondun crab, such as having a higher impact resistance, important as ballistic weapons are becoming more common. I listed comparable materials like duraplast in the description.
http://starwarsrp.net/topic/103277-knightsbane-first-order/
Requesting that this get pulled out of archives. I wasn't around to post a response to the judge, so I'm not sure if I need to take this second chance, or just reopen with that judge to continue the process.
Anyway, I'll address his concerns here so that if another judge is called in.
The process is clearly stated in the description section:
"To create a new Force resistant alloy, she biochemically treated the base elements of neutronium, carbon, and coltan by processing them through a special furnace made from a yaret-kor."
Yaret-kor eats the base materials, then processes them through its digestive track to create the bio-based material. I then harvest the material from the biot. You mentioned that I should look into Yuuzhan Vong tech, but I am using Vong tech to create the material. It's not any different than a biot eating something to grow new tissue, which is pretty much what's happening here.
Unlike materials such as Void-Stone, it has no Force Dampening effects (aside from the unlikely instance an FU finds themselves completely enveloped in the material). It just works off the principle of all Vong stuff that it can't be normally detected through the Force. For uncreative FU that rely on lazy tactics to engage an NFU, this could be a problem, but FU can still use their powers indirectly. Pushing a gust of air to hit a user that way. Dropping something heavy on them. Using Force Lighting/Electric Judgement. Cutting them with one of those fancy lightsabers FU so love. Just shooting them or grenading them like Obi-Wan. Decreasing their reaction time to compensate for the loss of precognitive abilities against a target clad in Knightsbane.
I could just save myself the trouble and get kitted out with a Ysalamir and lord over a Jedi wielding nothing but a lightsaber, but that's not really enjoyable for me. In PvP, when I engage someone as an NFU, I would like to be competitive without neutering my FU counterpart as what tends to happen with Mandalorians and other groups running around with all their Ysalamir/Soul-Steel/Void-Stone/etc. swag.
People may be submitting their own versions of materials because they don't have permission from writers of other subs to use their creations. That's why you see so many redundant things in the factory. That's not a valid reason to deny something. In any case, my alloy does have some advantages over biot materials like yorik coral or vondun crab, such as having a higher impact resistance, important as ballistic weapons are becoming more common. I listed comparable materials like duraplast in the description.
This seems like a nitpick, because I've seen subs with similar weaknesses listed without issue. I also have two weaknesses listed to one strength. These affiliated companies can still only create new constructions with this material at a limited production level. As a compromise, I can limit production to Panacea and KSA, my own companies, and have other company holders make a contract thread for permission to use the material.
I have no excuse for writing that, I apologize.
Cira
Best Onion
[member="Orihime Ike"] [member="Kalis Affassa"] [member="Ciana Teigra"]
Thank you for your patience. Factory staff will be reviewing this for Second Chance. I shall get back to you shortly.
Thank you for your patience. Factory staff will be reviewing this for Second Chance. I shall get back to you shortly.
Eternal Father
Redacted.
Cira
Best Onion
[member="Kalis Affassa"]
Moved from archives.
Moved from archives.
Cira
Best Onion
[member="Orihime Ike"]
After review and research through canon articles and checking the submission, on concept and execution, potential edits and such, the submission would be beyond the original.
The Force is all encompassing, and yes, there are several things one can do with the Force.
The concept of using the Force to bypass shields? I am not comfortable with this. Star Wars is High Fantasy, but there are limits to that.
Second chance denied.
After review and research through canon articles and checking the submission, on concept and execution, potential edits and such, the submission would be beyond the original.
The Force is all encompassing, and yes, there are several things one can do with the Force.
The concept of using the Force to bypass shields? I am not comfortable with this. Star Wars is High Fantasy, but there are limits to that.
Second chance denied.
Cira
Best Onion
[member="Ciana Teigra"]
Upon review of the submission, researching, and going over Yuuzhang Vong Technology and how it works with canon, this submission this second chance is denied on concept.
Upon review of the submission, researching, and going over Yuuzhang Vong Technology and how it works with canon, this submission this second chance is denied on concept.
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