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Submission Name: 501st Legion
Link to Submission: Click Here.

Reason for Modification:
Change of Ownership.
Change of faction Affiliation.

Modification:
Veiere Arenais - [member="Cedric Grayson"]
Silver Jedi Order - The Dominion
 
Submission Name: Thalia, Daughter of Osiris
Link to Submission: Link Here
Summary of Modification: Updating her age, General information, Gear, story, and rank from apprentice to Knight with various threads as proof.
Reason for Modification: It has been a while since I have modified her, and I feel that I should in order to stick closely with my characters story, as well as provide a reasonable companion to Atheus that ages and grows just as he does.
Modification: NOTE: The armor linked in the possessions is currently pending in the Factory.

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To delve into more of the Hellyni people, culture, and to bring the people a little more into the light. The intent is also as an apprentice that will show more of Atheus from a different point of view.
  • ​Image Credit: Artstation - Manuel Castanon, Edited size to be smaller and fit on the page.
  • Role: Apprentice, Leverage on Osiris, Son of Decimeus, King of Spathi,
  • Links:
    Works as the face of Cerberus Enterprise, Listed in these threads. [X] [X] [X]
  • Threads where she has taken any form of participation in. [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X]

PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 21 GSY
  • Force Sensitivity: Knight
  • Species: Hellyni
  • Appearance: Thalia is a smaller sized woman compared to the rest of her species. Standing tall at five foot two inches. Once being a very small frame that could be clearly identified as a girl who lived a lavish life, now has a honed, and well toned body that is muscular from the training an mentor-ship of Atheus. With her regular forms of exsersize to keep her body in shape, as well as utilizing Lightsaber, and longsword combat. Running, weightlifting, Swimming, Yoga, and even some limited forms of Echani Martial arts via training programs, Thalia is a young woman who has quite the impressive and beautiful body. Having blue eyes that look like the deep ocean just after a storm. A rare occurrence of her species as it is a very rare, recessive trait. A mix of black, brown, and red thick hair that stretches down to the middle of her back when let down.
​Generally seen simple smuggler designed clothing, or even elegant gowns when out on official business, She is mostly known when with Atheus to be wearing her armor. Upgraded from a simple Durasteel set, she uses it to her advantage as a learning bladewoman. She is also known to carry her own lightsaber. Generic in style and crystal usage, it is of her own creation. A white lightsaber blade for a sign of purity within her heart. She however, seems to be growing darker. Skin becoming pale instead of the nice tan look, and even her eyes showing flecks of gold and yellow from corruption to the dark side. Only time will tell if she will fall completely to the Dark side.

SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Thalia, Daughter of Osiris, Eris - As representative of Cerberus Enterprise, Theta 1 - Callsign.
  • Loyalties: Loyal to Atheus as an apprentice, and acts much like siblings. Ranking within the Iron Empire, and right hand lady to the Vanguard, that Atheus commands. She also has limited connections to Hora as a princess of Spathi, as well as connections to Commenor's government due to Atheus.
  • Wealth: As a princess, She is already wealthy enough to purchase many things. Yet most of it she never spends as she uses the credits gained as the face of Cerbeus to pay for anything she may need.
  • Notable Possessions:
    Scientia Potentia Est - A basic Sith Sword that Atheus created for Thalia to be used and trained with as per heritage of the Hellyni people, and culture before the creation of Lightsabers. (Name in Latin - Knowledge is power)
  • Hellynic Fury - A single bladed lightsaber that was created by Thalia after being accepted by Atheus as a student. Single bladed, and a Silver Lightsaber blade with a Dragon Pearl installed.
  • Wraith of Hora - A compound bow that she had taken from one of the product lines for the creation of the weapon. Uses mostly for silent missions, or when needing long range combat.
  • Seneschal Class-Vanguard Armor - A set of armor that was created using the same materials as Atheus' own knightly armor, it is to protect his apprentice, as well as allow Thalia to be much closer in battle than she has in the past.

[*]Skills:
  • Lightsaber Forms: Shi-Cho - Knight, Makashi - Apprentice
  • Longsword/Arming Sword - Knight
  • Force Sensory: Life - Knight, Force - Knight
  • Force Barrier: Basic - Knight, Adiabatic Barrier - Apprentice, Force Weapon - Untrained
  • Healing: Force Heal - Knight, Accelerated Healing(Self, Other) - Apprentice
  • Telekinesis - Knight
  • Animal Friendship - Apprentice
  • Mechu-Deru - Untrained

[*]Personality: Once a child that was naive to the galaxy, Thalia has slowly become a very formidable woman. She is very defiant in the face of fear, or challenges. Once a "typical teen" with a rather rebellious attitude, with an impish demeanor, She has matured much over the two years that Atheus has been training her. Once worried about the little things of the world, she now finds a closer relation to Atheus where as long as it doesn't bother her, she will not mess with it. Once having large amounts of friends and contacting them almost daily to try and stay in contact with them for fear of becoming a mindless force user, She now sees the error of her ways.

Mature, dedicated, and resilient. She has accepted who she is. A Princess who will one day have to lead an entire nation, and possibly even a planet. She takes this very seriously now more than ever before. Training to become the best that she can be. Learning that each decision she makes come with the responding consequence. Be it good or bad, she has accepted this is the real meaning of life.

As the relationship between her mentor, and herself is to be strictly professional, it has been broken from time to time. Slowly she has grown an attraction to the man who hides much from her. Even grows jealous and envious of Lady Kay, and Diana who Atheus has shown himself to, or any form of affection towards. She want's what she can't have. Atheus. Even going as far to say that she will do whatever she can to show Atheus that she is the right person for him.

She is near her tipping point. Tempted to outright confess her feelings to him, or to choose to let go, and let him slip away from her as the closest friend she could be. This troubles her, Angers her, and plagues her mind constantly. She knows that Atheus can feel her emotions, but can't actually read her mind to know why she has these strong and passionate feelings.

Sometime soon, she needs to choose. Him, or her people.

COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: Sith Sword, Lightsaber, The Force, Wraith Bow.
  • Combat Function: Once a submissive fighter, She is now well versed in usage of a Lightsaber and Sword. Trained to use a Bow and arrow, as well as rather adept with the force. Training under Atheus to be less of a submissive healer, and more of a Battle Medic. Willing and able to go toe to toe with apprentices and some knights. After all, being trained by a Master swordsman, and lightsaber duelist aids her. Reliable with field Intel, she is very nimble on her feet, and flexible. Running missions on her own as a scout, or carrier, She is also learning battle strategist from her Master. Mostly ground military incursions, but wont even touch fleeting. However, She is a terrible pilot. She can barely tell the difference between one button to the next. For all of her strength, and maturity, she is willing to give her life for Atheus. Her Loyalty is unquestioned, and she would happily sacrifice herself to save the lives of others. However, these can put her in bad situations. She is trustful of many, and while it could be good, she could be manipulated to do something she would regret later on. She also knows of emotions, and how she can use them to strengthen herself, but she can't control them, and they can sometimes run rampant.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Born to Osiris, Son of Decimeus, and Efreeti, Daughter of Aatris, Thalia is one of the heirs to the throne of Spathi. The only offspring of one of the two kings, A lot of responsibility is on her shoulders at a very young age. Growing up, she was considered a sheltered child due to her parents being past their prime. It would be very difficult of them to conceive another child. Osiris wanted a son. She wasn't the heir that the King wanted, and thus was treated rather poorly by her father. Looked down upon, and even denied Thalia to do many things. Even at a young age, she was taught how to defend herself on the field, and in the throne room. She was very capable and sure of herself. Her mother taught her how to be a queen and a mother. She is very close to her mother.


At the beginning of her teenage years, Thalia started to explore more of the city state of Spathi. Wanting to learn how the people operated, who they were, and to make relations with her people. Her father was scared that someone could hurt her, while her mother wanted to let her daughter learn how to treat people correctly. Thus she was allowed out into the city, but had to be under watch of guards. As like any princess, she wanted her space. Sneaking away from the guards from time to time. Meeting up with friends and even going out of the city to swim in the nearby lake.

With the acceptance of Atheus becoming her master, She was led on an adventure across the galaxy. Aiding the Mandalorian Crusaders, The Iron Empire, and even becoming Atheus' right hand woman for his military force known as the Vanguard. She became the face of his company Cerberus Enterprise, and acts like a motherly figure around him. Cleaning up the ship, and after him.


With the recent developments with Atheus and his acceptance of being a "Monster" and opening up to other women, She is stuck between her duty to her people, or her affection to Atheus.
 
Roshki Belawiiks said:
Submission Name: Roshki's Hallucination
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: I have a LOT to update about her hallucination. Mostly that Grey has now split into the three original personalities: Grey (the personification of her balanced - aka her true conscience), Jedi Belawiiks (personification of what she'd have been, had she chosen to commit to the light; like the angel on her shoulder), and Darth Zerona (personification of if she'd chosen the dark; like the devil on her shoulder)
Reason for Modification: I'm revamping Roshki, and I used this post to start. However, I've also evolved some things, so...yeah.
Modification: Would it be easier to just have me update it, and notify someone when I'm done? I guess there's not a *whole* lot, but it'd be easier if I went in there, edited, and then tagged someone and posted my edits and have them do a quick looksee before locking it again.

*********************************************************

​Submission Name​: (Karking) Maximillius
Link to Submission​: Here
​Summary of Modification​: He died in this thread.
Reason for Modification​: Again, revamping Roshki, and I needed a reason for her to behave the way she will. Figured the death of her one and only family member (and, technically speaking, her child, since she raised him from when he was a pup and is fiercely protective of him) would do the trick.
Modification​: Between "Name" and "Loyalties", put:

Status: ​Dead.

(please include the link, too. Thanks!)
Apologies for the wait.

Your second mod request is done.

Your first mod request links to the mod request thread. I have searched for the proper submission and put it in the Pre-Codex where you can work on edits for 2 weeks. When you are finished with your edits, tag me and I will pull it back to the active NPC forum for a re-judgement.

[member="Roshki Belawiiks"]
 
[member="Mahet"]

Thank you !

Where Veiere Arenais came to conclude that it was not in fact in his best interests, nor the Government of Ession for he to remain in service to the Dominion, the 501st Legion would remain on station to further serve the world, the people who would come to fall under the leadership of Cedric Grayson. By their correspondence, the 501st would continue to fight under the new King while Veiere would relinquish all ties to the military force.
 
  • Submission Name: Helix Syndicate Specialists
  • Link to Submission: [Here]
  • Summary of Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
  • Reason for Modification: Need to update the template to be in line with changes to the codex, change the name of the sub, overhaul the unit's description.
  • Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
 
Submission Name: Thalia Daughter of Osiris
Link to Submission: Click here
Summary of Modification: The information was doubled.
Reason for Modification: The information upon the character sheet for the notable NPC is doubled, and could be confusing as to why two forms of the same submission are duplicated.
Modification: Cut the bottom half of the submission to end after the first submission.

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

  • Intent: To delve into more of the Hellyni people, culture, and to bring the people a little more into the light. The intent is also as an apprentice that will show more of Atheus from a different point of view.
  • ​Image Credit: Artstation - Manuel Castanon, Edited size to be smaller and fit on the page.
  • Role: Apprentice, Leverage on Osiris, Son of Decimeus, King of Spathi,
  • Links:
    Works as the face of Cerberus Enterprise, Listed in these threads. [X] [X] [X]
  • Threads where she has taken any form of participation in. [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X]

PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 21 GSY
  • Force Sensitivity: Knight
  • Species: Hellyni
  • Appearance: Thalia is a smaller sized woman compared to the rest of her species. Standing tall at five foot two inches. Once being a very small frame that could be clearly identified as a girl who lived a lavish life, now has a honed, and well toned body that is muscular from the training an mentor-ship of Atheus. With her regular forms of exsersize to keep her body in shape, as well as utilizing Lightsaber, and longsword combat. Running, weightlifting, Swimming, Yoga, and even some limited forms of Echani Martial arts via training programs, Thalia is a young woman who has quite the impressive and beautiful body. Having blue eyes that look like the deep ocean just after a storm. A rare occurrence of her species as it is a very rare, recessive trait. A mix of black, brown, and red thick hair that stretches down to the middle of her back when let down.
​Generally seen simple smuggler designed clothing, or even elegant gowns when out on official business, She is mostly known when with Atheus to be wearing her armor. Upgraded from a simple Durasteel set, she uses it to her advantage as a learning bladewoman. She is also known to carry her own lightsaber. Generic in style and crystal usage, it is of her own creation. A white lightsaber blade for a sign of purity within her heart. She however, seems to be growing darker. Skin becoming pale instead of the nice tan look, and even her eyes showing flecks of gold and yellow from corruption to the dark side. Only time will tell if she will fall completely to the Dark side.

SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Thalia, Daughter of Osiris, Eris - As representative of Cerberus Enterprise, Theta 1 - Callsign.
  • Loyalties: Loyal to Atheus as an apprentice, and acts much like siblings. Ranking within the Iron Empire, and right hand lady to the Vanguard, that Atheus commands. She also has limited connections to Hora as a princess of Spathi, as well as connections to Commenor's government due to Atheus.
  • Wealth: As a princess, She is already wealthy enough to purchase many things. Yet most of it she never spends as she uses the credits gained as the face of Cerbeus to pay for anything she may need.
  • Notable Possessions:
    Scientia Potentia Est - A basic Sith Sword that Atheus created for Thalia to be used and trained with as per heritage of the Hellyni people, and culture before the creation of Lightsabers. (Name in Latin - Knowledge is power)
  • Hellynic Fury - A single bladed lightsaber that was created by Thalia after being accepted by Atheus as a student. Single bladed, and a Silver Lightsaber blade with a Dragon Pearl installed.
  • Wraith of Hora - A compound bow that she had taken from one of the product lines for the creation of the weapon. Uses mostly for silent missions, or when needing long range combat.
  • Seneschal Class-Vanguard Armor - A set of armor that was created using the same materials as Atheus' own knightly armor, it is to protect his apprentice, as well as allow Thalia to be much closer in battle than she has in the past.

[*]Skills:
  • Lightsaber Forms: Shi-Cho - Knight, Makashi - Apprentice
  • Longsword/Arming Sword - Knight
  • Force Sensory: Life - Knight, Force - Knight
  • Force Barrier: Basic - Knight, Adiabatic Barrier - Apprentice, Force Weapon - Untrained
  • Healing: Force Heal - Knight, Accelerated Healing(Self, Other) - Apprentice
  • Telekinesis - Knight
  • Animal Friendship - Apprentice
  • Mechu-Deru - Untrained

[*]Personality: Once a child that was naive to the galaxy, Thalia has slowly become a very formidable woman. She is very defiant in the face of fear, or challenges. Once a "typical teen" with a rather rebellious attitude, with an impish demeanor, She has matured much over the two years that Atheus has been training her. Once worried about the little things of the world, she now finds a closer relation to Atheus where as long as it doesn't bother her, she will not mess with it. Once having large amounts of friends and contacting them almost daily to try and stay in contact with them for fear of becoming a mindless force user, She now sees the error of her ways.

Mature, dedicated, and resilient. She has accepted who she is. A Princess who will one day have to lead an entire nation, and possibly even a planet. She takes this very seriously now more than ever before. Training to become the best that she can be. Learning that each decision she makes come with the responding consequence. Be it good or bad, she has accepted this is the real meaning of life.

As the relationship between her mentor, and herself is to be strictly professional, it has been broken from time to time. Slowly she has grown an attraction to the man who hides much from her. Even grows jealous and envious of Lady Kay, and Diana who Atheus has shown himself to, or any form of affection towards. She want's what she can't have. Atheus. Even going as far to say that she will do whatever she can to show Atheus that she is the right person for him.

She is near her tipping point. Tempted to outright confess her feelings to him, or to choose to let go, and let him slip away from her as the closest friend she could be. This troubles her, Angers her, and plagues her mind constantly. She knows that Atheus can feel her emotions, but can't actually read her mind to know why she has these strong and passionate feelings.

Sometime soon, she needs to choose. Him, or her people.

COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: Sith Sword, Lightsaber, The Force, Wraith Bow.
  • Combat Function: Once a submissive fighter, She is now well versed in usage of a Lightsaber and Sword. Trained to use a Bow and arrow, as well as rather adept with the force. Training under Atheus to be less of a submissive healer, and more of a Battle Medic. Willing and able to go toe to toe with apprentices and some knights. After all, being trained by a Master swordsman, and lightsaber duelist aids her. Reliable with field Intel, she is very nimble on her feet, and flexible. Running missions on her own as a scout, or carrier, She is also learning battle strategist from her Master. Mostly ground military incursions, but wont even touch fleeting. However, She is a terrible pilot. She can barely tell the difference between one button to the next. For all of her strength, and maturity, she is willing to give her life for Atheus. Her Loyalty is unquestioned, and she would happily sacrifice herself to save the lives of others. However, these can put her in bad situations. She is trustful of many, and while it could be good, she could be manipulated to do something she would regret later on. She also knows of emotions, and how she can use them to strengthen herself, but she can't control them, and they can sometimes run rampant.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Born to Osiris, Son of Decimeus, and Efreeti, Daughter of Aatris, Thalia is one of the heirs to the throne of Spathi. The only offspring of one of the two kings, A lot of responsibility is on her shoulders at a very young age. Growing up, she was considered a sheltered child due to her parents being past their prime. It would be very difficult of them to conceive another child. Osiris wanted a son. She wasn't the heir that the King wanted, and thus was treated rather poorly by her father. Looked down upon, and even denied Thalia to do many things. Even at a young age, she was taught how to defend herself on the field, and in the throne room. She was very capable and sure of herself. Her mother taught her how to be a queen and a mother. She is very close to her mother.

At the beginning of her teenage years, Thalia started to explore more of the city state of Spathi. Wanting to learn how the people operated, who they were, and to make relations with her people. Her father was scared that someone could hurt her, while her mother wanted to let her daughter learn how to treat people correctly. Thus she was allowed out into the city, but had to be under watch of guards. As like any princess, she wanted her space. Sneaking away from the guards from time to time. Meeting up with friends and even going out of the city to swim in the nearby lake.

With the acceptance of Atheus becoming her master, She was led on an adventure across the galaxy. Aiding the Mandalorian Crusaders, The Iron Empire, and even becoming Atheus' right hand woman for his military force known as the Vanguard. She became the face of his company Cerberus Enterprise, and acts like a motherly figure around him. Cleaning up the ship, and after him.

With the recent developments with Atheus and his acceptance of being a "Monster" and opening up to other women, She is stuck between her duty to her people, or her affection to Atheus.

 
Submission Name: Vikras Ansion

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/101155-vikras-ansion/#entry1461665
Summary of Modification:
Change of role, removing his affiliation to the Chimaera and accounting for a change in his biography returning him to Commenor.
Reason for Modification:
Since the NPC was made, I have changed factions and have since returned the vessel that this NPC commanded to it's former owner. I'm currently in the process of supporting a new Major Faction via its fleet and wish to have this Character reside over the Commenori Navy.
Modification:

Name: Admiral, Vikras Ansion
Loyalties: Veiere Arenais.
Role: Grand Admiral of the Commenori Naval Forces

Development Threads:
Troubled times ahead - Initial Post, supporting.

Age: 52yrs old.
Species: Human (Commenori).

Appearance:
The Admiral easily distinguishable through the former Imperial uniform, redesigned with the colors of the Commenori military persona; decorated with the striped insignia of his rank pinned to the left breast of the attire; Vikras Ansion looks every bit the part of the Chimaera’s crew while not forgetting where he has come from and all that he’s experienced to get there.

He has one noticeable scar that his attire does not cover, a severe burn to the left side of his neck, scarred and rising up to his jaw line, his ear on the same side is somewhat deformed, lacking a lobe unlike his right.

His hairline is receding, thin and greyed. While mostly clean shaven, he bears a moustache clean cut and well catered to match his hair style, brushed back and kept slick and presentable at all times.

Personality:
Vikras Ansion is steadfast in his professionalism, taking to his job with a zero tolerance to nonsense, his time in the Commenori Government as a military instructor has seen to his serious nature. His moral compass differs from Veiere’s in that he relies on tactical advantage and unless ordered, plays his cards closely; regardless of their differences, his loyalty is without question and beyond all other importance’s, his duty comes first to the Ship.

Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User.

Weapon of Choice: The DL-44 Heavy Blaster Pistol secured to his right hip has been a long trusted side-arm since his entrance into the Commenori Military Regiment. The holster of which comes black to go with the white uniform and offers room for such tools as a comm-device and personal datapad.

Skills: Vikras has become known best for his strategic value to the Commenori government, being reassigned to the Chimaera at Veiere’s request, it was the Jedi’s wish that the Command Ship be handled by a tactician that he could trust. The Admiral’s skills not only delve into Military Tactics but Space and Flight Navigation, Starship Engineering as well as Electrical; programing and Social Sciences (Psychology and some cultural studies).

Wealth: A man of average means with no living relatives to provide for, Vikras Ansion only has himself to care for. He has not amassed a great deal of wealth but rather takes a standard military commission worthy of the rank of Admiral.

Combat Function Commanding the Commenori Fleet in naval exercises and fleeting operations.

Notable Possessions: N/A

History:

As a child, Vikras lived a privileged life among those of fair wealth. His parents, Cavos and Helena Ansion afforded him a steady upbringing with an upper class and private education. By the end of his teenage years he chose to leave civilian life to pursue enlistment within the Commenori Military; there he struggled for his initial year as he was not accustomed to the new environment after the sheltered childhood he left behind.

After finding himself unsuccessful in his infantry training, Vikras pushed to be reassigned to the Commenori Navy, there they offered a variety of subjects under the merchant fleet where he would spend the next three years learning and living as a Comms-station operator under the government. While the path of the soldier had proven not to be for him, he excelled aboard the bridge of a ship. Quick to understand and further explore the many learnings of space flight and navigation, his formerly lavish education gained him a step above the rest of his fellow peers in training.

With the rise in criminality around Commenor's sector of space, it quickly became apparent that the trade world would see much more illicit enterprise with the disillusion of the Galactic Republic. No longer one of the larger players on the scale of galactic trade and political leadership, the Hutt Cartel moved to lean on the smaller more vulnerable planets. Eventually this would lead to Vikras' decision to transfer from the merchant fleet to the Naval Fleet and undergo a formal maritime commission

Up until Lady Kay’s disappearance from Commenor, Vikras Ansion served as a tactician for the Commenori Navy. His main purpose to train others worthy of the Commenori fleet should the time come that the world comes under attack from invading forces. From his earlier years he has risen up the ranks from a mere cadet however did not receive the commission of Admiral until being enlisted by the Jedi Knight in the hope of finding the Madame President, Lady Kay and returning her to her seat of government.

The transition from the world of Commenor to the Chimaera had not been an easy one, being not of the original crew, Vikras had to remain strong in the sight of his men to avoid assumptions of inferiority; the Chimaera itself now serving the Jedi as opposed to its original station under the Lords of the Fringe, left many feeling uneasy about their new alignment in that not only were they now fighting for an old foe.


Never the less, mutinies have thus far been deterred through moral leadership and gradually improving social standing throughout the vessel.

Updated: 4/30/2017

Veiere Arenais and Admiral Vikras Ansion both have since returned to Commenor where they serve their Queen and the government of the trade world. The Chimaera no longer in under their command and having been returned to the hands of Cyril Grayson's son and rightful heir, the two have turned their sights forward unto the prosperity of Commenors future and the political and military pursuits that come with the formerly small world of trade's expansion unto other territories.

Intent: To be commisioned under the effective leadership of the Commenor Government, to work under the Ministers of war and justice, alongside [member="Lady Kay"] and Veiere Arenais for the benefit of citizens within Commenori Space.
 

Kalius Aegrus

Guest
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Submission Name: 1st Experimental Assault Platoon
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: The changing of affiliation, some equipment details, and aesthetics to fit a new storyline befitting of a traitor unit.
Reason for Modification: Creation of a story, namely that of a "traitor platoon" and its defection.
Modifications:
  • Alter main image to this. Source is this.
  • Intent: To provide a fleshed out, basic submission for the unit proudly serving under Lord Captain Kalius Aegrus, having now defected from the First Order.
  • Affiliation: Lord Captain Kalius Aegrus
  • Strength: 30 Phase Zero Dark Troopers & 100 SD-10 Battle Droids
  • Addition of this final paragraph: Having long since seen the horrors of wars and defunct empire that the First Order strives to be, the 1st EAP were infiltrated and offered a chance to serve a superior cause. Stealing a small vessel to carry them all, many of the platoon defected from the First Order save for a large portion of the third squad.
 
Helix Syndicate said:
  • Submission Name: Helix Syndicate Specialists
  • Link to Submission: [Here]
  • Summary of Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
  • Reason for Modification: Need to update the template to be in line with changes to the codex, change the name of the sub, overhaul the unit's description.
  • Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
Done.
 
Atheus said:
Submission Name: Thalia Daughter of Osiris
Link to Submission: Click here
Summary of Modification: The information was doubled.
Reason for Modification: The information upon the character sheet for the notable NPC is doubled, and could be confusing as to why two forms of the same submission are duplicated.
Modification: Cut the bottom half of the submission to end after the first submission.

manuel-castanon-knight-girl-high-resolution_zps2ho3tqs8.jpg

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

  • Intent: To delve into more of the Hellyni people, culture, and to bring the people a little more into the light. The intent is also as an apprentice that will show more of Atheus from a different point of view.
  • ​Image Credit: Artstation - Manuel Castanon, Edited size to be smaller and fit on the page.
  • Role: Apprentice, Leverage on Osiris, Son of Decimeus, King of Spathi,
  • Links:
    Works as the face of Cerberus Enterprise, Listed in these threads. [X] [X] [X]
  • Threads where she has taken any form of participation in. [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X] [X]

PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 21 GSY
  • Force Sensitivity: Knight
  • Species: Hellyni
  • Appearance: Thalia is a smaller sized woman compared to the rest of her species. Standing tall at five foot two inches. Once being a very small frame that could be clearly identified as a girl who lived a lavish life, now has a honed, and well toned body that is muscular from the training an mentor-ship of Atheus. With her regular forms of exsersize to keep her body in shape, as well as utilizing Lightsaber, and longsword combat. Running, weightlifting, Swimming, Yoga, and even some limited forms of Echani Martial arts via training programs, Thalia is a young woman who has quite the impressive and beautiful body. Having blue eyes that look like the deep ocean just after a storm. A rare occurrence of her species as it is a very rare, recessive trait. A mix of black, brown, and red thick hair that stretches down to the middle of her back when let down.
​Generally seen simple smuggler designed clothing, or even elegant gowns when out on official business, She is mostly known when with Atheus to be wearing her armor. Upgraded from a simple Durasteel set, she uses it to her advantage as a learning bladewoman. She is also known to carry her own lightsaber. Generic in style and crystal usage, it is of her own creation. A white lightsaber blade for a sign of purity within her heart. She however, seems to be growing darker. Skin becoming pale instead of the nice tan look, and even her eyes showing flecks of gold and yellow from corruption to the dark side. Only time will tell if she will fall completely to the Dark side.

SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Thalia, Daughter of Osiris, Eris - As representative of Cerberus Enterprise, Theta 1 - Callsign.
  • Loyalties: Loyal to Atheus as an apprentice, and acts much like siblings. Ranking within the Iron Empire, and right hand lady to the Vanguard, that Atheus commands. She also has limited connections to Hora as a princess of Spathi, as well as connections to Commenor's government due to Atheus.
  • Wealth: As a princess, She is already wealthy enough to purchase many things. Yet most of it she never spends as she uses the credits gained as the face of Cerbeus to pay for anything she may need.
  • Notable Possessions:
    Scientia Potentia Est - A basic Sith Sword that Atheus created for Thalia to be used and trained with as per heritage of the Hellyni people, and culture before the creation of Lightsabers. (Name in Latin - Knowledge is power)
  • Hellynic Fury - A single bladed lightsaber that was created by Thalia after being accepted by Atheus as a student. Single bladed, and a Silver Lightsaber blade with a Dragon Pearl installed.
  • Wraith of Hora - A compound bow that she had taken from one of the product lines for the creation of the weapon. Uses mostly for silent missions, or when needing long range combat.
  • Seneschal Class-Vanguard Armor - A set of armor that was created using the same materials as Atheus' own knightly armor, it is to protect his apprentice, as well as allow Thalia to be much closer in battle than she has in the past.

[*]Skills:
  • Lightsaber Forms: Shi-Cho - Knight, Makashi - Apprentice
  • Longsword/Arming Sword - Knight
  • Force Sensory: Life - Knight, Force - Knight
  • Force Barrier: Basic - Knight, Adiabatic Barrier - Apprentice, Force Weapon - Untrained
  • Healing: Force Heal - Knight, Accelerated Healing(Self, Other) - Apprentice
  • Telekinesis - Knight
  • Animal Friendship - Apprentice
  • Mechu-Deru - Untrained

[*]Personality: Once a child that was naive to the galaxy, Thalia has slowly become a very formidable woman. She is very defiant in the face of fear, or challenges. Once a "typical teen" with a rather rebellious attitude, with an impish demeanor, She has matured much over the two years that Atheus has been training her. Once worried about the little things of the world, she now finds a closer relation to Atheus where as long as it doesn't bother her, she will not mess with it. Once having large amounts of friends and contacting them almost daily to try and stay in contact with them for fear of becoming a mindless force user, She now sees the error of her ways.

Mature, dedicated, and resilient. She has accepted who she is. A Princess who will one day have to lead an entire nation, and possibly even a planet. She takes this very seriously now more than ever before. Training to become the best that she can be. Learning that each decision she makes come with the responding consequence. Be it good or bad, she has accepted this is the real meaning of life.

As the relationship between her mentor, and herself is to be strictly professional, it has been broken from time to time. Slowly she has grown an attraction to the man who hides much from her. Even grows jealous and envious of Lady Kay, and Diana who Atheus has shown himself to, or any form of affection towards. She want's what she can't have. Atheus. Even going as far to say that she will do whatever she can to show Atheus that she is the right person for him.

She is near her tipping point. Tempted to outright confess her feelings to him, or to choose to let go, and let him slip away from her as the closest friend she could be. This troubles her, Angers her, and plagues her mind constantly. She knows that Atheus can feel her emotions, but can't actually read her mind to know why she has these strong and passionate feelings.

Sometime soon, she needs to choose. Him, or her people.

COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: Sith Sword, Lightsaber, The Force, Wraith Bow.
  • Combat Function: Once a submissive fighter, She is now well versed in usage of a Lightsaber and Sword. Trained to use a Bow and arrow, as well as rather adept with the force. Training under Atheus to be less of a submissive healer, and more of a Battle Medic. Willing and able to go toe to toe with apprentices and some knights. After all, being trained by a Master swordsman, and lightsaber duelist aids her. Reliable with field Intel, she is very nimble on her feet, and flexible. Running missions on her own as a scout, or carrier, She is also learning battle strategist from her Master. Mostly ground military incursions, but wont even touch fleeting. However, She is a terrible pilot. She can barely tell the difference between one button to the next. For all of her strength, and maturity, she is willing to give her life for Atheus. Her Loyalty is unquestioned, and she would happily sacrifice herself to save the lives of others. However, these can put her in bad situations. She is trustful of many, and while it could be good, she could be manipulated to do something she would regret later on. She also knows of emotions, and how she can use them to strengthen herself, but she can't control them, and they can sometimes run rampant.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Born to Osiris, Son of Decimeus, and Efreeti, Daughter of Aatris, Thalia is one of the heirs to the throne of Spathi. The only offspring of one of the two kings, A lot of responsibility is on her shoulders at a very young age. Growing up, she was considered a sheltered child due to her parents being past their prime. It would be very difficult of them to conceive another child. Osiris wanted a son. She wasn't the heir that the King wanted, and thus was treated rather poorly by her father. Looked down upon, and even denied Thalia to do many things. Even at a young age, she was taught how to defend herself on the field, and in the throne room. She was very capable and sure of herself. Her mother taught her how to be a queen and a mother. She is very close to her mother.

At the beginning of her teenage years, Thalia started to explore more of the city state of Spathi. Wanting to learn how the people operated, who they were, and to make relations with her people. Her father was scared that someone could hurt her, while her mother wanted to let her daughter learn how to treat people correctly. Thus she was allowed out into the city, but had to be under watch of guards. As like any princess, she wanted her space. Sneaking away from the guards from time to time. Meeting up with friends and even going out of the city to swim in the nearby lake.

With the acceptance of Atheus becoming her master, She was led on an adventure across the galaxy. Aiding the Mandalorian Crusaders, The Iron Empire, and even becoming Atheus' right hand woman for his military force known as the Vanguard. She became the face of his company Cerberus Enterprise, and acts like a motherly figure around him. Cleaning up the ship, and after him.

With the recent developments with Atheus and his acceptance of being a "Monster" and opening up to other women, She is stuck between her duty to her people, or her affection to Atheus.

That must have happened in the original edit. Fixed now.
 
Veiere Arenais said:
Submission Name: Vikras Ansion

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/101155-vikras-ansion/#entry1461665
Summary of Modification:
Change of role, removing his affiliation to the Chimaera and accounting for a change in his biography returning him to Commenor.
Reason for Modification:
Since the NPC was made, I have changed factions and have since returned the vessel that this NPC commanded to it's former owner. I'm currently in the process of supporting a new Major Faction via its fleet and wish to have this Character reside over the Commenori Navy.
Modification:

Name: Admiral, Vikras Ansion
Loyalties: Veiere Arenais.
Role: Grand Admiral of the Commenori Naval Forces

Development Threads:
Troubled times ahead - Initial Post, supporting.

Age: 52yrs old.
Species: Human (Commenori).

Appearance:
The Admiral easily distinguishable through the former Imperial uniform, redesigned with the colors of the Commenori military persona; decorated with the striped insignia of his rank pinned to the left breast of the attire; Vikras Ansion looks every bit the part of the Chimaera’s crew while not forgetting where he has come from and all that he’s experienced to get there.

He has one noticeable scar that his attire does not cover, a severe burn to the left side of his neck, scarred and rising up to his jaw line, his ear on the same side is somewhat deformed, lacking a lobe unlike his right.

His hairline is receding, thin and greyed. While mostly clean shaven, he bears a moustache clean cut and well catered to match his hair style, brushed back and kept slick and presentable at all times.

Personality:
Vikras Ansion is steadfast in his professionalism, taking to his job with a zero tolerance to nonsense, his time in the Commenori Government as a military instructor has seen to his serious nature. His moral compass differs from Veiere’s in that he relies on tactical advantage and unless ordered, plays his cards closely; regardless of their differences, his loyalty is without question and beyond all other importance’s, his duty comes first to the Ship.

Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User.

Weapon of Choice: The DL-44 Heavy Blaster Pistol secured to his right hip has been a long trusted side-arm since his entrance into the Commenori Military Regiment. The holster of which comes black to go with the white uniform and offers room for such tools as a comm-device and personal datapad.

Skills: Vikras has become known best for his strategic value to the Commenori government, being reassigned to the Chimaera at Veiere’s request, it was the Jedi’s wish that the Command Ship be handled by a tactician that he could trust. The Admiral’s skills not only delve into Military Tactics but Space and Flight Navigation, Starship Engineering as well as Electrical; programing and Social Sciences (Psychology and some cultural studies).

Wealth: A man of average means with no living relatives to provide for, Vikras Ansion only has himself to care for. He has not amassed a great deal of wealth but rather takes a standard military commission worthy of the rank of Admiral.

Combat Function Commanding the Commenori Fleet in naval exercises and fleeting operations.

Notable Possessions: N/A

History:

As a child, Vikras lived a privileged life among those of fair wealth. His parents, Cavos and Helena Ansion afforded him a steady upbringing with an upper class and private education. By the end of his teenage years he chose to leave civilian life to pursue enlistment within the Commenori Military; there he struggled for his initial year as he was not accustomed to the new environment after the sheltered childhood he left behind.

After finding himself unsuccessful in his infantry training, Vikras pushed to be reassigned to the Commenori Navy, there they offered a variety of subjects under the merchant fleet where he would spend the next three years learning and living as a Comms-station operator under the government. While the path of the soldier had proven not to be for him, he excelled aboard the bridge of a ship. Quick to understand and further explore the many learnings of space flight and navigation, his formerly lavish education gained him a step above the rest of his fellow peers in training.

With the rise in criminality around Commenor's sector of space, it quickly became apparent that the trade world would see much more illicit enterprise with the disillusion of the Galactic Republic. No longer one of the larger players on the scale of galactic trade and political leadership, the Hutt Cartel moved to lean on the smaller more vulnerable planets. Eventually this would lead to Vikras' decision to transfer from the merchant fleet to the Naval Fleet and undergo a formal maritime commission

Up until Lady Kay’s disappearance from Commenor, Vikras Ansion served as a tactician for the Commenori Navy. His main purpose to train others worthy of the Commenori fleet should the time come that the world comes under attack from invading forces. From his earlier years he has risen up the ranks from a mere cadet however did not receive the commission of Admiral until being enlisted by the Jedi Knight in the hope of finding the Madame President, Lady Kay and returning her to her seat of government.

The transition from the world of Commenor to the Chimaera had not been an easy one, being not of the original crew, Vikras had to remain strong in the sight of his men to avoid assumptions of inferiority; the Chimaera itself now serving the Jedi as opposed to its original station under the Lords of the Fringe, left many feeling uneasy about their new alignment in that not only were they now fighting for an old foe.


Never the less, mutinies have thus far been deterred through moral leadership and gradually improving social standing throughout the vessel.

Updated: 4/30/2017

Veiere Arenais and Admiral Vikras Ansion both have since returned to Commenor where they serve their Queen and the government of the trade world. The Chimaera no longer in under their command and having been returned to the hands of Cyril Grayson's son and rightful heir, the two have turned their sights forward unto the prosperity of Commenors future and the political and military pursuits that come with the formerly small world of trade's expansion unto other territories.

Intent: To be commisioned under the effective leadership of the Commenor Government, to work under the Ministers of war and justice, alongside [member="Lady Kay"] and Veiere Arenais for the benefit of citizens within Commenori Space.
Done
 
Kalius Aegrus said:
Submission Name: 1st Experimental Assault Platoon
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: The changing of affiliation, some equipment details, and aesthetics to fit a new storyline befitting of a traitor unit.
Reason for Modification: Creation of a story, namely that of a "traitor platoon" and its defection.
Modifications:
  • Alter main image to this. Source is this.
  • Intent: To provide a fleshed out, basic submission for the unit proudly serving under Lord Captain Kalius Aegrus, having now defected from the First Order.
  • Affiliation: Lord Captain Kalius Aegrus
  • Strength: 30 Phase Zero Dark Troopers & 100 SD-10 Battle Droids
  • Addition of this final paragraph: Having long since seen the horrors of wars and defunct empire that the First Order strives to be, the 1st EAP were infiltrated and offered a chance to serve a superior cause. Stealing a small vessel to carry them all, many of the platoon defected from the First Order save for a large portion of the third squad.
Done
 
  • Submission Name: Helix Syndicate Enforcers
  • Link to Submission: [Here]
  • Summary of Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
  • Reason for Modification: Need to update the template to be in line with changes to the codex and overhaul the unit's description.
  • Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
 
Helix Syndicate said:
  • Submission Name: Helix Syndicate Enforcers
  • Link to Submission: [Here]
  • Summary of Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
  • Reason for Modification: Need to update the template to be in line with changes to the codex and overhaul the unit's description.
  • Modification: Unlock and move into pre-codex.
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