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Sebastian Thel

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Submission Name: William Ermolai
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/127210-william-ermolai/
Summary of Modification: Changing name of NPC and removal of Sebastian's Force usage.
Reason for Modification: The character with whom the NPC is associated, Sebastian Thel has been changed from a Force-user to a non-Force user, also to give him a name which doesn't sound too much like Sebastian's.

Modification:

Change of name from William Ermolai to Arthur Ermolai

Removal of

"When he saw Loreena Arenais being harassed by a group of students, he rushed to Sebastian to help her, who refused at first. Upon seeing Sebastian scare the group away with a Force push, William became terrified and fled."

To be replaced with

"When Sebastian ran away to Alderaan, William was once again left without a friend."

Removal of

"He is terrified of the Force and harbors respect towards Sebastian upon discovering his friend's powers"
 
Submission Name: Granite Guard
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Update equipment.
Reason for Modification: Developd and purchased some new tech. The ACS-602 High Explosive Specialty Ammunition and the ACS-205 Advanced Dual Weapon System were purchased in the storefront (request here, permission here). ACS-004 Titan Assault Armor was purchased in the storefront (request here, permission here).
Modification:

In Equipment, Heavy Weapons, replace:

Missile Launcher. Modern equivalent with Lance Missile Launcher


In Equipment, Rifles add:

In Equipment, Armour add:
 

Sebastian Thel

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Submission Name: William Ermolai
Link to Submission: Link
Summary of Modification: Please archive this submission
Reason for Modification: This NPC is undergoing a major overhaul and will be re-posted.
Modification: Archival
 
Submission Name: Hapan Kitsune
Link to Submission: Link!
Summary of Modification: Please send to the deepest darkest parts of the Archive
Reason for Modification: Re-creating the race to come from a new planet (subs WIP)
Modification: None!
 

Fiolette Fortan

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Submission Name: CJMB Clarke-Porras
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Point of Interests, Entry Change.
Reason for Modification: Fiolette no longer uses the bases, and has turned it over to Zoronhed officials to be used as a refugee center.
Modification: Please change 'Primo Victorian,' on the Point of Interest to, 'Zeigler Center of Hope'

  • Zeigler Center of Hope
    When Primo Victoria left the military base, it gave the real estate to Zoronhed officials who then turned it into the Zeigler Center of Hope. This would act as a refugee crisis center as well as a homeless shelter providing assistance and resources to those in need. Social workers, counselors, and volunteers help run the facility assisting those who reside here with getting back on their feet.


Note: IC Thread, where Fiolette moves out of the base with intent to turn it over to Zoronhed.
 
  • Submission Name:Castagne
  • Link to Submission: Castagne
  • Summary of Modification: Change coordinate Hex of S-56 to S-46 on planet sub.
  • Reason for Modification: Need to update coordinates on sub to meet faction plans
 
Submission Name: Eyes of the Forest
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Update equipment.
Reason for Modification: Adding some new tech, removing unneeded gear that doesn't fit the unit.
Modification:


In Equipment, Mission-specific, incidental or used by Specialists, remove:

add:

In Equipment, Standard, add:


In Equipment, Standard, change this:

'Spectre Scout Armour. Comlink has an encryption device. Wear earpiece communicators with built-in translators. Coloured to match terrain. Wear earpiece communicators with built-in translators.'


To this:

Spectre Scout Armour. Comlink has an encryption device. Wear earpiece communicators with built-in translators.
 
To boldly alchemize what no one alchemized before
Submission name: Griet van Vliet
Link to Submission: [X]
Summary of modification: Change of picture, change of Force-sensitivity level
Reason for modification: The original picture is too big, and also Griet has been used regularly in RPs
Modifications:

Replace the image by the following (still crediting the same source for the image, just cropped to fit the codex image size guidelines, with the current image being now 730x1000)

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Replace
  • Force-stasis (Knight-level)
  • Force-shield (Padawan-level)
by
  • Force-stasis/Neural Storm (Knight-level)
  • Force-shield (Knight-level)
and also
  • Force Sensitivity (Knight)
by
  • Force Sensitivity (Master)
 
Submission Name: Death Squadron
Link to Submission: Click
Summary of Modification: Fix an error
Reason for Modification: Theres a url that shouldn't be there messing up the picture.
Modification: ​Take out the URL by the picture and center the image.
 

Anya Venari

Star Queen Tirathana VII
Submission Name: Tygara

Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/51999-tygara/
Summary of Modification: Set population to zero. Add explanation to history.
Reason for Modification: With the growing threat of the Sith, the various Eldorai and cousin races have decided to evacuate the planet using Firemane’s ships and seek a new home in the stars. This is consistent with all the race’s views, but especially the Eldorai who never want to be enslaved or conquered again like what happened with Kaeshana. A thank you to [member="Siobhan Kerrigan"] for her assistance in writing this modification is also in order.
Modification:
(Add to population):
No sentient population. All available flora and fauna had breeding stock taken.

(History):

As Semiramis had predicted, the star people soon returned to Tygara. A fleet of corsairs descended upon the planet. However, the slavers were thwarted when another group of outsiders appeared in orbit - Firemane and the Eldorai. The Shahbânu realised that these outsiders were different and could be either a bane or an asset. She was proven right. Due to the imminent destruction of Kaeshana by a massive asteroid, the Eldorai sought a new home. Proving herself a pragmatic leader, Semiramis made an alliance with them. While the outsiders found the Qadiri practice of slavery highly disagreeable, they sought to affect its gradual abolition, as they wanted to get rid of it in a sustainable manner that did not leave the slaves destitute.

Moreover, they faced common enemies, as the new settlements were attacked by the Xioquo. Eventually, after several battles, the allied forces stormed the Underealm. The Xioquo's 'demigoddess' Mystra was awoken by a cabal of matriarchs, but turned out to be a menace to her people. She was ultimately defeated in a duel with Siobhan Kerrigan and their allies. However, while the Qadiri felt considerable antipathy for their historic enemy, Firemane wanted to integrate the Xioquo into the Tygaran community of nations, not destroy them. Thus they were granted autonomy under a new Queen Liavondra. The secret Lightsider dedicated herself to healing the wounds produced by centuries of oppression, hoping to wean her people off despotism. At the same time she strove to acquire technology from the star people to assure the independence of her people. Moreover, slavery was abolished, having already become impractical after a huge slave uprising during the Battle for the Underealm.

With the defeat of the Xioquo large-scale warfare ceased on Tygara. However, daily life was not free of strife, and occasional brush fire conflicts broke out. Many Qadiri slaves took advantage of the star people's sympathy for their plight by fleeing to Firemane or Eldorai territory. This increased the pressure for the Qadiri rulers to abolish the institution. Some Tygarans entered into the services of the star people or left the stars independently.

Firemane sent a peaceful expedition to the Vashyada, initiating diplomatic negotiations. While the wood elves were wary of outsiders due to their history, they consented to the establishment of a trade outpost at the edge of their territory. However, relations between Firemane and the Eldorai Matriarchy soured after the Kaeshana Rebellion and an anti-human uprising orchestrated by corrupt Eldorai aristocrats.

With the rise of The Sith Empire and the collapse of the SSC and Galactic Alliance, Tygara was vulnerable to the rising tide. With no strong allies and Firemane’s reluctance due to continual Eldorai intrigue, a summit was called to decide the future of Tygara. At this summit it was decided to use a mixture of Sanctuary Habitat ships and Asur Worldships to evacuate the entire planet. Firemane rented these stations to the Eldorai and other races, but maintains a controlling interest on board. This monumental effort involved the dismantling of the newly constructed New Santaissa , Fort Kerrigan and the Star Fortress as well as a relentless process of providing supplies and getting people on board.

There was of course resistance as the native races were frightened by the new technology and being pushed into space. Full scale wars even developed among the warring Qadiri nations, but eventually the populations of the Qadiri were put onto a Sanctuary Habitat with a strong core of advisors.

The Xioquo and Vashyada were much easier, being less in population and being led by farsighted leaders who were able to see the necessity of the move.

Though it took nearly a year, the planet was statistically denuded of population and they moved onto a new and brighter future in the stars.
 

Azmodan

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Submission Name: The Xarixi Corps
Link to Submission: x
Summary of Modification: Equipping the Xarixi Corps with better weaponry
Reason for Modification: Want to better equip my people.
Modification: Change ACS-204 to Victoria's Secret

Submission Name: The Wreckers
Link to Submission: x
Summary of Modification: Equipping the Wreckers with better weaponry.
Reason for Modification: Want to better equip my people
Modification: Change ACS-201 to Devil's Boomstick
 
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