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[member="Causstik Rahn"]

For starters, this Mercenary band is Hutt Cartel affiliated. The new armor you have listed is only allowed for Mandalorian affiliated units, of which this is not.

The new weapon is fine.

Where is the development you have done to support the upgrade to B quality?
 
[member="Causstik Rahn"]

There are 767+ replies to that rebellion and 39 pages. I am not going to go through and look for your posts. Get me direct links to your posts that are relevant to the development of this unit.

I will change out the name and add in the weapon. That armor is questionable and needs to be looked into. They will remain at C quality until you provide me with the development posts and they are deemed proper for the promotion.
 
Submission Name:One Sith Staff PT 1
Link to Submission:One Sith Staff PT 1
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:One Sith Staff PT 2
Link to Submission:One Sith Staff PT 2
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Grey Riders
Link to Submission:Grey Riders
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Sluagh
Link to Submission:Sluagh
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Werda Prudii
Link to Submission:Werda Prudii
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation
 
[member="Causstik Rahn"]
That armor is under review by Staff due to some oversights in its initial approval. It will have to wait until Factory RPJ assesses the issue.

I will read through the development soon and get back to you.
 
Submission Name: Eclipstica
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/35495-eclipstica/?hl=romeo
Reason for Modification: To add the many new animals, and various plants that have been made
Modification:


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Name: Eclipstica

Region: Tingel Arm
System: Shadow Realm
Suns: Theres one sun, not named. Red dwarf.
Orbital Position: Habitual.
Moons: There is one moon, it orbits the sun. Not named.
System Features: There are a few other planets, there is a red ring that spirals around the planet though. Because the moons orbts the sun, the planet only has a eight hour period of light on the planet.
Coordinates: All the way above Belkadan touching the end of the Galaxy Map there.
Rotational Period: One day is 28 hours long, but theres only a 9 hour period of Sun light in a day.
Orbital Period: 450 days.
Class: Terrestrial, a tad bigger than Earth.
Diameter: 13,093 km in diameter
Atmosphere: 1
Climate: Temperate. Though thats on the main continent, and the third, and forth, each other continent has its own biome status. The Main continent (Obidia) is full of plant, plains, mountains, and other normal surface biomes. The second continent (The Scars) is a large desert full of acidic pools of water, and where a majority of the cracks, and canyons leaking dark side energy reside . The third (Black Gate) is a place of rain, and normal conditions, though it seems its constantly raining there, and the forth (Koloss) is a graveyard where the Shadow Kingdom used to reside in its formal reign. Its now is a dead civilized area with corroded buildings, and a castle. The green life is is very much dead, literally everything In this area is dead, and thus resides the shells of what used to be alive. The fifth (White Gate) is a place of snow, and ashe.
Gravity: Standard
Primary Terrain: Grassland

Native Species: Bladed Tigers Whisker Fish Silacanth Lizards Battle Lizards Delvas Plants Dark Hounds



Immigrated Species: Anyone willing to succumb to the dark side may come here, and rebuild, as of yet, there is no living soul on this planet, save the dark side.
Primary Languages: Basic
Government: Monarchy
Population: Over ten million people
Demonym: Shadows
Major Imports: None.
Major Exports: Most material here is of metals that can be found commonly in other areas. Also because there is no living beings here, the export doesnt really matter till a community can be established here. Fruit can also be a export if one can do this.
Affiliation: Shadow Empire (Shadow Kingdom/Shadow Dynasty)

Major Locations:
In Obidia there is the Five Circles, each a city whos names have long not been spoken. Each was governed by a Duke.
There is Crezten the city of metal, and stone here all the smithing was done. Every single construct, armor, weapons and whatever else was made here. Duke Reilan lived here, and was a smith himself. This city was the first to be built due to the need of resources. This was probably the most none corrupted area of the Five Circles.
Terra the city of vices, here many things would have been found to entertain someone, from gambling, lust, drinking, and killing another being. This was Sin City, this was a place not even the king was ever seen at due to all the nickname given by the builders. This was probaly the most corrupted place in Obidia, and was governed by Duke Zeko. The royals of Obidia spent much of their time here, wasting money, and being slobs.
Gren the city of farming, all the food was produced here, though fruits seemed to be the major farming here. It was safe to say that many of the people here ate a lot of vegetables, and fruits. This was governed by Duchess Siri'ola who was a personal friend of the king. This was a peaceful place, and the king would visit often to see the Duchess, and enjoy the peace. This was also the first place to be destroyed during the Darkest Hours War.
Yelisa was the city of royalty (This is where all royal blood lines come from.) When the people began to expand, Gaiden had to choose others for royal blood, most were his military, advisers, and other close friends he made here. No builder was ever of royal blood. This place was build with the best metals that could be found on he planet, and no house was a singe story. Yelisa was known to be ruled by many people, the first being Duke Geoff. The was to be Duchess Olka, but the city usurped her near the end of the inhabitants' lives.
Devias the city of this is where all the builders lived, this area was a slum, and poorly built. This was the largest of all cities for there were more builders than any other civilian. The citys were all in circles with large black walls, but Devias. Many builders died here not being needed anymore in the eyes of the royals. The king didnt come here in fear that many builders wanted him dead. This was true for this was the beginning place for many uprisings.

The Scars is a place of all desert, and acidic water pools. The large cracks, and canyon are seeping with dark side energy. Going near one is a sure way to walk the path of darkness. This place is a wasteland, there is nothing here but bones, and death. This place is filled with the whispers of the all those who died in the Darkest Hours War.

Black Gate is pretty normal, a lot like Obidia, but it rains here constantly, and only one city was here, and it was named Fallen Region. Here all exiles were commanded to reside, or else face death. This place has almost no way for one to live a comfortable life has it appears the soil is poor. The walls were built with wood, and two Black Spikes (Guard towers) Were placed to watch the people in exile. It was said that many dangerous, and large creatures lived here under, and preyed on the Exiles.

Koloss is again very much so like Obidia, but only the Shadow Keep existed, and still does, here. The keep is quite large with something like 100 plus rooms. The keep had a large wall of black metal, and spike towers, three on each side, and one on both sides of the gate. Shadow Keep has one large spire in the middle, and is built into a mountain. The spire is called Shadow Nest, it was where the king slept, along with his queen. Shadow Keep was greatly tainted by the dark side of the force through the king, and usually was cold inside. This meant that fires were on constantly, unless it was the eight hour period of the day.

Culture: Daily life was full of working all day, and sleeping at night with few days off. The King had many people working many jobs, but had them working constantly. So this gave them all the ability to make income, but hardly any time to enjoy it. The King hardly came out of his keep, only to stop crisis, and wars. The government was set up so that only the King's sons could rule, declaring he owned the planet, and all its people. Essentially they were all humans, and the force was used, but it wasnt called the force, it was called the Dark Sign. Many people of the kingdom could use it, and exactly how they find out how to use it seems to deal with the Rakata. Days were spent in the sunny times, and seasons existing. There was happiess, and sadness. Royal families wanted to take over, but were easily stopped by the Kings army, and put back in their place. Apart from that life was normal for anyone under rule of a King. Anyone capable of using the force was forced into the King's army, unless they were noble of blood.

Technology: Standard Tech, vehicles existed, but nothing that was flying, hovering did exist. Blasters were used, and swords, lightsabers did not exist. Forcesabers did. Droids of simple structures existed, as well as speeders. They had not come to the point of making anything within military in the case of vehicles.

History:
-During the Infinite Empire, there was a Force Hound named Gaiden. Gaiden was used has an experiment, and they later through him into the planet called Eclipstica where he was ordered to begin building a Empire here. The Rakata later on with the war with the Jedaii, forgot about Gaidens mission, believing he had probably died along with the other slaves they left with him to build the empire.
-He Succeeded, and when realizing they werent coming back, became the King of the empire, dubbing it the Shadow Empire, for they were just a shadow of what they came from.
-Gaiden marries his lover Arieen, and his children are thus born.
-Gaidens reign as King is full of joy, and he shows his children the ways of the force. He also builds the Shadow Council, declaring them all of royal blood, and orders the slaves to build them estates.
-Gaiden dies, and his oldest son, Murick becomes King.
-Murick is nearly assassinated by a servant girl, he opts its time to marry.
-Murick marries his wife Sella, and their children are born.
-Murick is almost assassinated again, this time by a guard. Murick kills the man, hangs his body in public for all to see.
-Murick thus begins to reign like a tyrant with his brothers, Uriel, and Ferrin plot to stop him. The Shadow Council is also plotting their own rebellion.
-The Shadow Council want a new blood line to rule, and begin to secretly build a army.
-While Uriel ans Ferrin are plot, the council get their army of builders to attack the keep.
-Shadow Council fails in their plots, and are sent to the lands know as The Scars as exiles, some refuse and are killed.
-Ferrin succeeds in stopping Murick, and his older brother Uriel reigns as King. Uriel also builds the Black Guard to protect him with Ferrin head of the guard.
-Uriel marries Steph, and his children are born.
-Uriel is a loved king, his rule is flourished, and is considered a prime example of Gaiden.
-Uriel is must bring down a rebellion in the builders, and is successful.
-Ferris dies in a uprising with the Exiles attempting to come back. Uriel then takes his friend, Izekel to command the Black Guards. Exiles are pushed back.
-Uriel dies, and his son Dez takes over, and marries his wife Gerial.
-Dez reshapes the kingdom to his liking, becoming another Murick. He soon builds the Five Circles, and is thus given the people a distraction from his plans to expand the kingdom.
-Dez brings the Exiles out of The Scars to serve as his Shadow Council.
-Dez has two sons, and a daughter.
-His eldest son, Murick II over throws his father, and reigns as King, sending both his dad, and the Shadow Council back to their places in exile.
-Murick II marries an unknown woman, and gets a bastard son named Sigil.
A small up rising comes up, it is destroyed against the builders again.
-Murick II dubs his new guards as Fiends, training them all to be killers.
-A small war between Exiles, and Royals comes to the light, and Murick II kills all the Exiles.
-Murick II begins to further his knowledge of the Dark Side, and starts experimenting on the ways of Drain Life.
-Murrick II is succumbed by the dark side wholly, and is beginning as another tyrant, known as Murick The Devourer.
-His son Sigil begins a rebellion that is nearly successful, this starts the Darkest Hours War, and Murick II begins to corrode the planet with his darkness the stronger he gets in it.
-Murick II builds up his power to drain life. He kills his son in a dramatic fight, thus ending the war.
-Murick II Continues to reign as king, draining life of his people in his own castle to keep himself alive for a longer period of time, this is where the castle gets its corruption.
-Murick is overcomed with darkness, and much like Nihilis, drains life from every life form on the planet, and engulfs himself in the process. Everyone on the planet dies, and thus ends the reign of the bloodline of Gaiden.
-A small freighter finds its way to the planet, it crashes onto it, and everyone dies, but not before the planets whereabouts are sent out in a multi message to many different people.
-Romeo Grabs a hold of one of these messages, in his search for the truth Romeo decides to rule this planet himself, and continue the legacy of the Shadow Empire.
-Romeo Sin, and the Hazard Beauty find the planet, Romeo finally dubs himself King of the Shadow Empire, beginning a new era on the planet.


Notable PCs: Romeo Sin.
Intent: The goal for this planet is for Romeo to begin rebuilding it back to its former glory, and to rule as a King. The other intent is to make a darkside planet, and give the faction Romeo owns a capital if they ever go Major.
 
Count Morcus said:
Alright, made the edits to the request.

[member="Silencia"]
I think you misunderstood me. I did not mean you had to pick a new location. I meant you had to put the actual map coordinates (X,Y)

If you look at the Chaos map you will see we have added a coordinate system with letters and numbers. Please indicate the proper grid coordinates for your location choice and make sure it follows the planet creation rules guidelines for choosing your map location:

1. Player-created non-canon planets may only be added to grids on the map that have 3 or less planets already occupying that grid.

2. Planets requesting to be added to grids with 4 or more planets already occupying that grid will be asked to move or be denied. Previously existing entries are grandfathered in.

3. Players may add planets to previously existing systems, ie. any planet/system already on the map.

4. Custom created planets may now only be added to the outer rim or unknown regions.
 
Causstik Rahn said:

Ok after reading your dev and dealing with the questionable armor here is what I am willing to do:

The armor is now only at semi-unique availability, which means it is only useable for select PC's or special NPC's. Your dev for B quality doesn't quite meet the expectations of what I would like to see for the entire troop to be bumped up. Not to mention, the higher in Quality you go with units, the smaller the number.

Here is what I am willing to do:

I am willing to bump up a small portion of this group (no more than 20 of them total) to B quality and allow you to outfit them with the specialized Mynock Flight armor. You can give them a special name or whatever if you want. The rest of the group will remain at C and with the armor you originally subbed them in.

Thoughts?
 
Balaya Praelior said:
Submission Name:One Sith Staff PT 1
Link to Submission:One Sith Staff PT 1
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:One Sith Staff PT 2
Link to Submission:One Sith Staff PT 2
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Grey Riders
Link to Submission:Grey Riders
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Sluagh
Link to Submission:Sluagh
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation

Submission Name:Werda Prudii
Link to Submission:Werda Prudii
Reason for Modification: No longer part of the One Sith or Voice of Sector Five
Modification: Change Sector Five, One Sith to "Firebird Society" in loyalty/affiliation
Done
 
Causstik Rahn said:
Thank's that sounds great. I suppose I will have to create a submission, yes? [member="Silencia"]
You can if you like or you can keep it internal to the current submission and just add them in as a new division to the group itself. Either way I will still need you to do a short write-up on the variations between the base mercs in the group (C quality) and the new Veterans (B quality)
 

Ugohr Poof

The Traveling Gungan Salesman
Submission name: Rings of the Lord
Link to submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/88414-rings-of-the-lord/
Reason for modification: The unit has acquired battlefield experience
Modification: Increase in quality level from C to A (elite)
Pertinent development threads:
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New submision:

Name: Rings of the Lord
Intent: Background units for Ugohr Poof
Affiliation: Galactic Alliance
Availability: Unique
Quality: A - Elite
Type: Armored minesweepers
Strength: At full strength, the unit would comprise 12 tanks
Description: A volunteer unit of minesweepers raised on Ringo Vinda, the Rings of the Lord were trained in motorized minesweeping and in tank combat due to the nature of the tanks they use, that didn't want to sit around waiting for Ringo Vinda to be attacked on the ground to fight the One Sith. Because of their dual minesweeping-armor duties, they are making use of the Zamboni minesweeping main battle tank so that they can carry out both duties without having to change vehicles. As for transportation from a planet to another, they use two Kamek-class medium transports, each of which carrying six tanks apiece. Of course, an armored unit is not without its sidearms: whereas all the non-Force-sensitives were equipped with a M837 "Riposte" blaster sidearm, Ugohr, as the sole Jedi serving in the unit, uses an orange lightsaber with a black core instead.

With 48 sentients that actively fight and man the tanks, plus a 20-sentient-strong reserve, and another 20 droids that tend to the equipment and the needs of the sentients that fight within the unit, they were but, since the Galactic Alliance has very few minesweeping units, they constantly hop from battlefield to battlefield, with their former base of Ringo Vinda not being considered as a base anymore. The 68 sentients are a mixture of humans, Jawas and Gungans.

Having served with distinction on Malastare and Coruscant, as well as Dahomey, they remain, to this day, the elite (and perhaps only) minesweeping unit in the Galactic Alliance's ground army.
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Submission Name: 501st Legion
Link to Submission: Click Here.

Reason for Modification:
Change of Ownership,
Change of faction Affiliation.

See here and here.

See here for the In-Character change of Command over the 501st Legion.

Modification:
Change of Ownership from [member="Darth Arcis"] to @Veiere Arenais.
 
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