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[member="Rexus Wenck"]

That augment is beefy- I've updated, but please keep in mind that NPCs will always be less powerful than similar PCs for the upcoming PvP stuff.

Updated.
 
Submission Name: The Raven Owls
Link to Submission: Herehttp://starwarsrp.net/topic/133794-the-raven-owls/
Summary of Modification: Update equipment / Combat Information
Reason for Modification: Change of concept / power (as discussed with Cloaking Devices) to keep theme. Replacing Personal Cloaking Devices with Reflec coated armour
Modification:


In Equipment, change:


To:
In Combat Information, change:
  • Deployment: Limited.
To
  • Deployment: Minor.
 
Submission Name: Order of Fire
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Add a subgroup, correct accidentally misleading information in history.
Reason for Modification: Subbed an NPC unit that would be a subgroup of the Organisation. I listed those in the Membership section, so I would like it added. Would like to correct two errors in the History section.
Modification:


In Membership, add the following to the list of groups:



In Historical Information, paragraph 1, change:

Adril was a former slave who had been abducted by pirates from the Eldorai homeworld Kaeshana.

to this:

Adril was a former slave who had been abducted from the Eldorai homeworld Kaeshana by pirates.


in Historical Information, paragraph 5, change:

For a while, she and Tegaea ruled the Protectorate as Lady Protector and Exarch.


to this:

For a while, Tegaea and Siobhan ruled the Protectorate as Lady Protector and Exarch.
 
Submission Name: Skirae's Emporium
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/94356-skiraes-emporium/page-1#entry1372241
Summary of Modification: Change description and other parts to suit new location
Reason for Modification: Last location destroyed, rebuilding on another planet
Modification:

Location: Imahalyan
Description: Skirae's Emporium is a small two story building. The lower story is the store part, holding trinkets and trade items for travelers to the planet ruled by his wife @Stardust Australis Raxis. This included local foods and trinkets made of local materials. The store was more of a tourist stop more than anything, and a hobby to the tradesman. The top floor was made as his home, a residence for him to stay in close to his store. It tends to get crowded with it's stacked shelves and visitors coming in and out.

History: (Added in second paragraph after first) After the Siege Of Commenor, the original story was destroyed. Darben and his family escaped and settled on Imahalyan where he rebuilt and set down roots, rebuilding his store.
 
Submission Name: The Revenants
Link to Submission: Herehttp://starwarsrp.net/topic/132219-the-revenants/
Summary of Modification: Update equipment
Reason for Modification: Document the cybernetics the unit has access to, as the submission says they're cyborgs and describes them having enhanced physical attributes. Requested edits provide a frame of reference.
Modification: In Equipment, add:



[*]Cybernetic respirator
[*]Advanced sensory implant
 
Name: Genetically Modified Power-Consuming Organism
Link: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/134056-genetically-modified-power-consuming-organism/
Summary: Population -> Planetary
Reason: So I'm allowed to use it in this factory sub
Modification:
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

Intent: To design a modified species that effectively counters modern anti-EMP tech without destroying entire planets in the process.

Image Credit: N/A

Canon: Yes

Links: Wayne Technologies, Wayne Tech Research Facility Y-322


GENERAL INFORMATION


Name: Genetically Modified Power-Consuming Organism

Designation: Non-sentient

Homeworld: Grown on Roon

Language: N/A

Average Lifespan: Estimated 5 years within specialized habitat, about a solid 10 seconds outside of specialized habitat

Estimated Population: Planetary (grown at one location; distributed as product throughout the Galaxy)

Description: A species of microorganisms based off of the alien Power-Consuming Organism. The species has been modified to breathe in pure Argon gas to prevent replication outside of a controlled environment. When outside of an Argon-saturated atmosphere the species will quickly perish. It feeds of energy/electricity and can destroy electronics with uncanny efficiency and speed.


PHYSICAL INFORMATION


Breathes: Argon gas

Average Height of Adults: .25 mm

Average Length of Adults: .5 mm

Skin color: Translucent

Distinctions: They have very small wings that allow them to reach electrical food off of the ground level, as well as small legs that can grip to most surfaces. They sport small antennae used strictly for communication with others in their species.

Races: None

Strengths:

- Adios, electros: A capsule of these things can wipe out an electronics system like the Plague wiping out Europe in the Middle Ages. They can typically wreck havoc within a radius of 12 feet from the point of origin before dying.

- Invisible: Their miniscule size makes them undetectable to both scanners and the naked eye

Weaknesses:

- Short lifespan: After leaving their Argon-saturated environment, these things last a good 10 seconds before asphyxiating

- Cannot reproduce: The only way for them to be conceived is to be grown in a lab


CULTURE


Diet: Electricity; can be consumed through static in the air or directly through electronics

Communication: Through touch via antennae

Technology Level: None

Religion/Beliefs: None

General Behavior: Basic communication occurs via them rubbing antennae with one other. They attempt to mate frequently, likely due to their origins as a force meant to wipe out entire rebelling planets. However, due to their reproductive organs being made defunct, this is pretty much pointless. They are always hungry, ever looking to consume whatever energy they can get their hands (not literally) on. They don't form into particular social groups such as colonies, though they tend to typically stick together in pursuit of food. When food/energy begins to run out, they have been known to cannibalize in order to consume the residual energy left behind in one another.


HISTORICAL INFORMATION



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A power-consuming organism was created by an alien species. It was microscopic and capable of self-replication, and was genetically programmed to hunt down and consume power sources. Created to end a civil war, the organism destroyed the enemy's weapons of mass destruction, which in turn caused their opponent to release a virus that killed the majority of the planet's population and mutate the rest. ~Wookieepedia
The power-consuming organism (unofficial name) was created by an unknown alien species long ago with the sole purpose of ending civil war by wiping out enemy electronics. They would breed and spread across a planet, eventually turning it into an electrical dead zone. In essence, it was a considerably more potent version of the EMP.

Wayne Tech researchers re-discovered the species on an unnamed planet in Wild Space after a horde came through and wiped out their electronics. Samples were taken in a secure environment and shepherded back to the company's research facility on Roon. Every precaution was taken to contain them, and despite an almost-mishap, they were securely kept in a closed environment. The researchers saw the microorganisms as a way to combat all of the anti-EMP and anti-Ion tech being developed across the galaxy. However, the scientists also didn't want to unleash a plague-like storm of organisms that would render a planet an electrical dead zone. And so their work began.


The Biomedical division of Wayne Tech, upon inspecting the organism, was surprised to find that it was actually shaped like a microscopic insect. It had antennae, six legs, and even tiny wings. They realized that they would have to cripple these organisms a great deal in order to prevent them from spreading like disease. First, they manipulated their breathing capabilities to survive in only Argon-rich environments. This, they hoped, would kill them off quickly in the event of an escape. The second failsafe both prevented them from causing widespread mass destruction and made it impossible for other companies to breed and sell their product. They simply mutated the organisms' reproductive organs into not working at all.

In testing, the small insectoid creatures performed as hoped. Upon release, they would seek and destroy any and all nearby electronics. This included tech believed to be shielded from EMP and other forms of electrical interference. They were found to function, in essence, as a unique form of electronic warfare. Now, the scientists at Wayne Tech are charged with a new challenge; to make this organism easily deployable on the field of battle.
 
[member="Judas Wayne"] - I took a look over the sub in question in factory, what you are aiming at and what [member="Gir Quee"] has suggested. I have changed the population to that sub to Scattered (rather than planetary) because it fits what you are trying to do here I believe, while keeping the flavor (since it really can't be Planetary without an argon atmosphere, the populations here are a little ::hand waggles:: for these kind of engineered critters but we can hit as close as possible). Based on the limitations in the sub itself, this seemed like the best fit for what you are hoping to accomplish.

Updated.
 
Submission name: VPN Accounting LLP
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/133511-vpn-accounting-llp/
Summary: Changes in Realm, addition of links, modification of membership, influence, reputation and history
Reason for modification: VPN Accounting went public IC
Modifications:

Change Links to:
Change Realm to: Akarui [HQ], Alzoc III

Change Membership to: Currently VPN Accounting LLP has about a hundred staff accountants and a number of support personnel, in addition to five equity partners and another eight non-equity partners. It depends on the level of experience and skill of prospective new hires: new graduates in accounting that have yet to earn their CPA designations will be hired at the junior staff level, while other support personnel, such as accounting clerk and other clerical and maintenance workers, remain at that level until such a time has come to promote them to the support personnel equivalent of a junior staff accountant. Once a junior staff accountant earns a CPA designation, the accountant earns a promotion (and with it, a raise) to senior staff accountant, and new hires with a CPA designation can also become a senior staff accountant at start, with non-equity partners and equity partners left in tightly controlled numbers.

Change Influence to: It is growing in influence within the accounting landscape of Wild Space, but outside of the Outer Rim, it doesn't have much of an influence

Change Reputation to: It has gained a reputation in Wild Space for accurate accounting services

Add the following to the end of Historical Information:

After the initial success of the firm on Akarui and elsewhere in Wild Space, VPN Accounting LLP sought to expand beyond the means typically used by accounting firms, hitherto operating mostly as cottage industries, and its higher management realized that going public was the best option for ensuring its long-term growth. The resulting initial public offering marked a significant turn in the history of Wild Space's accounting world where an accounting firm actually became publicly traded. Its profile was thus significantly raised as well; however, on a galactic scale, it is still a relatively unknown firm.
 
Submission Name: Eisenkrieger
Link to Submission: Herehttp://starwarsrp.net/topic/115405-eisenkrieger/
Summary of Modification: Update equipment
Reason for Modification: Update equipment. ArmaTech gear purchased in marketplace (request here, permission here). Also document the cybernetics the unit has access to, as the submission says they're cyborgs and describes them as having enhanced physical attributes due to this. Requested edits help provide a better frame of reference.
Modification:


In Equipment, replace:

With:

In Equipment, Standard, add:


In Equipment, add the following section:


Cybernetics:

[*]Bonemer
[*]Cybernetic Respirator
 
Submission Name: Glory Hounds
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Update equipment. Change Deployment from Mass to Minor.
Reason for Modification: Acquired some new stuff via the marketplace. Rationale for Deployment downgrade is that it's an elite unit due to their specialised training and gear. So them having less soldiers makes sense for balancing purposes.
Modification:



In Deployment, change

  • Deployment: Mass. The unit is a single company of 120 soldiers, but the entire unit tends to be deployed into combat.

To:

Deployment: Minor.



In Equipment, Heavy, change:


To:


In Equipment, Rifles, add:

In Equipment, Misc, add:

ACS-208 Wrist Ion Beamer (storefront request here, permission here).
ACS-208 Wrist Tensor (storefent request here, permission here).
ACS-207 Cryoban Gun (storefent request here, permission here)
Wrist Bolter.
Under-Barrel Sonic Blaster (storefent request here, permission here).
 
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